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tpo 36 franchise rather than opening a new business

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The material discusse the concept of franchise. While the reading states that it is better to buy a franchise rather than opening a new independent business, the listening challenges this and mentions that when the study looks closer, it puts this idea in a question. Fitrst, the author posits that franchise could solve the problem of finding a reliable suppliers. On the other hand, the profesor opposes this and says that franchise companies use specific goods and sevices, which are over prices, and the owner of the business has to use from these suppliers. The lecturer adds that even though there are equilvalent and cheaper suppliers available in the markert, the owner of the business does not allow to buy from them. Second, the writer points out that fanchise could owners' save money that could be allocated for advertisments. On the contrary, the professor refutes this and states that the franchise owners agree to pay six percent of their sales to the franchise comapany. The lecturer adds that some of this money could return back to owners through advertising. The speaker explains that the franchise companies do not advertise to a specific business, but they advertise for their brands and products, which are sold by many buisnesses at many places. The lecturer adds that the direct advertising for a business could be more beneficial and consume half of this money. Third, the reading contends that the failure rate of a franchise is much lower than a new independent business. Conversely, the lecturer contradicts this and points out that openning a franchise is more secure than a new business, but it is not the most reliable option. The professor explains that there is a third option, the reading did not mention. The speaker adds that buying an already existing business could have twice chance of sucsess at the first four years as franchise.
The material
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discusse
the concept of franchise. While the reading states that it is better to
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buy
a franchise
rather
than opening a new independent
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business
, the listening challenges this and mentions that when the study looks closer, it puts this
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idea
in a question.

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Fitrst
, the author posits that franchise could solve the problem of finding a reliable
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suppliers
.
On the other hand
, the
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profesor
opposes this and says that franchise
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companies
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use
specific
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goods
and
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sevices
, which are over prices, and the
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owner
of the
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business
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has to
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use
from these suppliers. The
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lecturer
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adds
that
even though
there are
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equilvalent
and cheaper suppliers available in the
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markert
, the
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owner
of the
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business
does not
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allow
to
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buy
from them.

Second, the writer points out that
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fanchise
could owners' save money that could
be allocated
for
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advertisments
.
On the contrary
, the professor refutes this and states that the franchise
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owners
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agree
to pay six percent of their sales to the franchise
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comapany
. The
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lecturer
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adds
that
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some
of this money could
Consider using "return".
return back
to
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owners
through advertising. The speaker
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explains
that the franchise
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companies
do not advertise to a specific
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business
,
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but
they advertise for their brands and products, which
are sold
by
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many
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buisnesses
at
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many
places.
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The
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lecturer
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adds
that the direct advertising for a
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business
could be more beneficial and consume half of this money.

Third, the reading contends that the failure rate of a franchise is much lower than a new independent
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business
.
Conversely
, the
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lecturer
contradicts this and points out that
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openning
a franchise is more secure than a new
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business
,
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but
it is not the most reliable option. The professor
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explains
that there is a third option, the reading did not mention. The speaker
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adds
that buying an already existing
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business
could have twice chance of
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sucsess
at the
first
four years as franchise.
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IELTS essay tpo 36 franchise rather than opening a new business

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
5.5
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