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tpo 34 the reasons OF Steller's sea cow extinction

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The material discusses the reasons of Steller's sea cow extinction. While the reading suggests three causes of this extinction, the listening challenges all these causes that outlined in the reading passage. First, the author states that native Siberian overhunted sea cows because they were a good source of food in a harsh environment. On the other hand, the professor opposes this and points out that sea cows were a massive creature, one of them was nine-meter-long and ten tons weight. The lecturer adds that a couple of sea cows could feed Siberian people for a month. in addition to that, the Siberian population was not very large, so they did not need to hunt a lot of sea cows. The speaker says that native Siberian could not take sea cows to the point of extinction. Second, the writer mentions that ecosystem disturbances caused the reduction of kelp which was the main food source of sea cows. On the contrary, the professor refutes that and posits that if the ecosystem changed, it might cause a decline in other marines, such as whales. The lecturer explains that there was not a report of whales' decline. According to the lecture, there was no indication of broadening ecosystem disturbances, so kelps were enough, and sea cows did not have any experience of food shortage. Third, the reading cites that European fir traders had weapons that allowed them to hunt sea cows quickly, so they hunted the last sea cows. Conversely, the professor contradicts this and brings up that sea cows extinct soon after the European arrival. The lecturer adds that when European fur traders arrived, the sea cows were already declined. The sea cows started to decline a hundred years before Europeans' arrival. The professor concludes that it was supposed to be another reason that responsible for this decline.
The material discusses the reasons of
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Steller
's
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cow
extinction. While the reading suggests three causes of this extinction, the listening challenges all these causes that outlined in the reading passage.

First
, the author states that native Siberian
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overhunted
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sea
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cows
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because
they were a
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good
source of food in a harsh environment.
On the other hand
, the
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professor
opposes this and points out that
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sea
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cows
were a massive creature, one of them was nine-meter-long and ten tons weight. The lecturer
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adds
that a couple of
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sea
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cows
could feed Siberian
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people
for a month.
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in
addition to that, the Siberian population was not
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very
large,
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so
they did not need to hunt
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a lot of
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sea
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cows
. The speaker says that native Siberian could not take
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sea
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cows
to the point of extinction.

Second, the writer mentions that ecosystem disturbances caused the reduction of kelp which was the main food source of
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sea
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cows
.
On the contrary
, the
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professor
refutes that and posits that if the ecosystem
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changed
, it might cause a
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decline
in other marines, such as whales. The lecturer
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explains
that there was not a report of whales'
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decline
. According to the lecture, there was no indication of broadening ecosystem disturbances,
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so
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kelps
were
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enough
, and
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sea
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cows
did not have any experience of food shortage.

Third, the reading cites that European fir traders had weapons that
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allowed
them to hunt
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sea
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cows
quickly
,
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so
they hunted the last
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sea
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cows
.
Conversely
, the
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professor
contradicts this and brings up that
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sea
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cows
extinct
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soon
after the European arrival. The lecturer
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adds
that when European fur traders arrived, the
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sea
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cows
were already declined. The
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sea
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cows
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started
to
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decline
a hundred years
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before
Europeans' arrival.
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The
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professor
concludes that it
was supposed
to be another reason that responsible for this
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decline
.
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IELTS essay tpo 34 the reasons OF Steller's sea cow extinction

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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