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The American President Clay's life that wrong known aspects of life

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In this set of materials, the writer and the lecturer are discussing the influences of American Elections at 1812. They are largely discordant with each other while the writer offers that president Clay has heroic figure in American History other claims that he is known many of drawbacks which he did during presidential mission. There are found some reasons; he enforced laws, pressures the congress to pass acts and leads to kill hundreds of indians people. The lecturer invalidates the writer’s assertions in all aspects and demonstrates that president Clay is not known heroic person in the American History that he has negative aspects. The details of the professor’s refutation are explained in the following paragraphs respectively. Firstly, President Clay used laws subjective aim which includes serious results. For instance, his friend was elected by clay that is moral risk to the community. To pass The Chief Executive law, he enforce to congress. He used constitutional laws for own benefits, although he is a fame president and general in the past times. He has strengthened power via laws and not give an equal executive. Secondly, he is known with bad fame among The American Indians, because American forces kill hundreds of Creek Indians in the battle. Moreover, he forced to removal Cherooke Indians from their land, cause of natural sources. This behaviour oppose the real human acts that in our time. In the Clay time, big part of the community believe in Clay whatever he want to do it. So, he get to force over Indian tribes that are known peaceful people. But, sources more important than humanity for Clay. To sum up, books include different story about Clays, he has known a historical figure American History. The boos portrayed powerful, respectful and hero, these are common features. Especially, lecturer point out Clay’s need to limitless power and responsibility face to laws in order to use own benefits.
In this set of materials, the writer and the lecturer are discussing the influences of American Elections at 1812. They are
largely
discordant with each other while the writer offers that president
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Clay
has heroic figure in American History other claims that he is
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known
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many
of drawbacks which he did during presidential mission. There
are found
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some
reasons; he enforced
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laws
, pressures the congress to pass acts and leads to kill hundreds of
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indians
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people
. The lecturer invalidates the writer’s assertions in all aspects and demonstrates that president
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Clay
is not
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known
heroic person in the American History that he has
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negative
aspects. The
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details
of the professor’s refutation are
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explained
in the following paragraphs
respectively
.

Firstly
, President
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Clay
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used
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laws
subjective aim which includes serious results.
For instance
, his friend
was elected
by
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clay
that is
moral
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risk
to the community. To pass The Chief Executive
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law
, he
The pronoun 'he' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "enforces", "enforced".
enforce
to congress. He
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used
constitutional
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laws
for
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own
benefits, although he is a fame president and general in the past times. He has strengthened power via
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laws
and not give an equal executive.

Secondly
, he is
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known
with
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bad
fame among The American Indians,
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because
American forces kill hundreds of Creek Indians in the battle.
Moreover
, he forced to removal
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Cherooke
Indians from their land, cause of natural sources.
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This behaviour oppose
the real human acts that in our time. In the
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Clay
time,
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big
part of the community believe in
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Clay
whatever he
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want
to do it.
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So
, he
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get
to force over Indian tribes that are
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known
peaceful
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people
.
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But
, sources more
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important
than humanity for Clay.

To sum up, books include
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different
story about
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Clays
, he has
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known
a historical figure American History. The boos portrayed powerful, respectful and hero, these are common features.
Especially
, lecturer point out
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Clay’s
need to limitless power and responsibility face to
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laws
in order to
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use
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own
benefits.
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IELTS essay The American President Clay's life that wrong known aspects of life

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
318 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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