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tpo 34 the elephant- size dinosaur

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The reading and lecture talk about the ability of the elephant-size dinosaur to survive the harsh condition in arctic climate on Alaska's North slope. The reading states that many paleontologists have suggested that the edmontosaur survived the winter by migrating south to more hospitable regions and provides three reasons for support. However, the lecture explains that the reading's reasons are unconvincing, and casts doubt on each one of them. First of all, the reading points out that dinosaurs would have migrated to find food because in winter no plants could grow in dark and cold North slope. The professor opposes this point. The professor mentions that the arctic climate was warmer than it is today, and it was sunny 24 hours a day in the summer. As a result, the plants grew heavily in the summer and dinosaurs had a lot of nutritious dead plants during the winter. Secondly, the article claims that many edmontosaur skeletons have been found in the same site which means that they would have lived in herds. Living in herds supported that they migrated because many of the modern animals prefer to migrate in herds. The lecturer opposes this point by saying that animals live in herds for many reasons such as the protection even if they live in the same area all the time. He adds that many of the modern animals live in herd for this reason and they do not migrate. Lastly, the author points out that edmontosaurs had the physical ability that helped them migrate. The professor refutes this point by stating that juvenile animals could not travel for long distances and adults could not leave them behind. As a result, the whole herd had to remain with juveniles.
The reading and lecture talk about the ability of the elephant-size dinosaur to survive the harsh condition in arctic climate on Alaska's North slope. The reading states that
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many
paleontologists have suggested that the
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edmontosaur
survived the winter by migrating south to more hospitable regions and provides three
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reasons
for support.
However
, the lecture
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explains
that the reading's
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reasons
are unconvincing, and casts doubt on each one of them.

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First of all
, the reading
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points
out that dinosaurs would have migrated to find food
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because
in winter no plants could grow in dark and
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cold
North slope. The professor opposes this
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point
. The professor mentions that the arctic climate was warmer than it is
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today
, and it was sunny 24 hours a day in the summer.
As a result
, the plants grew
heavily
in the summer and dinosaurs had
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a lot of
nutritious dead plants during the winter.

Secondly
, the article claims that
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many
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edmontosaur
skeletons have
been found
in the same site which means that they would have
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lived
in
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herds
. Living in
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herds
supported that they migrated
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because
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many
of the modern
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animals
prefer to migrate in
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herds
. The lecturer opposes this
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point
by saying that
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animals
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live
in
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herds
for
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many
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reasons
such as the protection even if they
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live
in the same area all the time. He
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adds
that
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many
of the modern
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animals
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live
in
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herd
for this
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reason and
they do not migrate.

Lastly
, the author
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points
out that
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edmontosaurs
had the physical ability that
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helped
them migrate. The professor refutes this
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point
by stating that juvenile
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animals
could not travel for long distances and adults could not
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leave
them behind.
As a result
, the whole
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herd
had to remain with juveniles.
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IELTS essay tpo 34 the elephant- size dinosaur

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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