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Tourism today creates a variety of problems, such as pollution due to flights, transport and dirty water. Do you think that governments should impose extra taxes on flights or accommodation to restrict today’s tourism industry? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience

Travelling today is simple to the extent that within twelve hours one can travel from Europe to Singapore, crossing nearly the whole globe. Based on this simplicity, tourism has changed significantly over the years. While in the past a family would be proud to drive two hours to a lake, many families now think nothing of travelling to the far side of the world. This also has a downside as increased pollution is a result. Extra taxes on flights or accommodation have therefore been offered as a solution so as to increase the cost of tourism and reduce its popularity. No matter what major transportation is used, travelling creates pollution. To decrease the amount of pollution caused by tourism, the tourism industry itself would have to be weakened. If these increased taxes are based on travelling distance, people would be more willing to stay closer to their home country, as for many even a slight increase would mean that their planned holidays would be too expensive. Accommodation taxes would raise holiday costs no matter the distance travelled. Therefore, if increased taxes were levied on travel and accommodation, tourism and therefore pollution would decrease. On the other hand, the main transport methods that would be impacted by imposing extra taxes would be communal ones, such as planes, trains and buses, and increasing the taxes would also impact non-tourists. Also, holidays are a vital part of ordinary people’s lives, as they escape from work and stress, and get to spend valuable time with their families. Stopping people travelling would greatly impact some simple pleasures of ordinary life. In conclusion, while tourism impacts the environment significantly, simply introducing extra taxes on transport or accommodation is a drastic measure. It could be more valuable to change the methods of transportation to decrease pollution, instead making people stay close to home.
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has a downside as increased
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pollution
is a result. Extra
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taxes
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accommodation
have
therefore
been offered
as a solution
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. To decrease the amount of
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caused by
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, the
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industry itself would
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distance,
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would be more willing to stay closer to their home country, as for
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even a slight increase would mean that their planned holidays would be too expensive.
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Accommodation
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taxes
would raise holiday costs no matter the distance travelled.
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, if increased
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taxes
were levied
on travel and
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accommodation
,
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and
therefore
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pollution
would decrease.

On the other hand
, the main transport methods that would
be impacted
by imposing extra
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taxes
would be communal ones, such as
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planes
, trains and buses, and increasing the
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would
also
impact non-tourists.
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, holidays are a vital part of ordinary
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lives
, as they escape from work and
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stress
, and
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get
to spend valuable time with their families. Stopping
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people
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travelling
would
greatly
impact
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some
simple pleasures of ordinary life.

In conclusion
, while
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tourism
impacts the environment
significantly
,
simply
introducing extra
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taxes
on transport or
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accommodation
is a drastic measure. It could be more valuable to
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change
the methods of transportation to decrease
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pollution
,
instead
making
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people
stay close to home.
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IELTS essay Tourism today creates a variety of problems, such as pollution due to flights, transport and dirty water. Do you think that governments should impose extra taxes on flights or accommodation to restrict today’s tourism industry? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience

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