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Tourism is always a force for good which enables people of different countries to understand each other.’ To what extent do you agree with this idea? You should give reasons for your answer, and include ideas and examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Tourism is always a force for good which enables people of different countries to understand each other. ’ You should VBrlm
The role of tourism is widely debated, with some people saying that it enhances a developing country’s economy when other countries have a good alliance with them. A country is composed of its people, culture and nature. Tourism is a gateway for other countries to know each other. I agree with this point and I will explain why in this essay. Firstly, we must consider the opportunities created for the people when we are established to the world. Economic growth is the key for the country and its people. To give ambience for foreigners visiting the country, government will have good infrastructure like roadways and airways. This creates opportunity for occupations, starting own business and a decent living. Tourism is not just a getaway, foreigners also look for business opportunities. Country’ economy will be growing when there is foreign currency flow, so then government can provide good education, jobs and support for elder people. Industrialization will be developed and attracts foreign investments. This all can happen only when people from different countries understand each other. I would like to mention Qatar as an example for this topic. Qatar rose from saw dust to magnificent tall buildings. They are one of the deciding factor in the world’s economy. One main factor I like about their adaptation from other country culture is equal rights for their women unlike Saudi still having woman under a man’s control. Qatari women are given opportunity to educate themselves and shine in their careers. To conclude, every aspects has a good and bad effects. We must be take the good and know what is bad, I am not saying there is only positive impacts but there is also negatives. A government should support their people and implement strong laws to be followed.
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country’s
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other
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countries
have a
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alliance with them. A
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country
is composed
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people
, culture and nature. Tourism is a gateway for
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countries
to know each
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. I
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opportunities
created for the
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when we
are established
to the world. Economic growth is the key for the
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country
and its
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people
. To give ambience for foreigners visiting the
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,
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government
will have
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infrastructure like roadways and airways. This creates
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opportunity
for occupations, starting
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own
business and a decent living. Tourism is not
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just
a getaway, foreigners
also
look for business
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economy will be growing when there is foreign currency flow,
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government
can provide
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people
. Industrialization will
be developed
and attracts foreign investments. This all can happen
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people
from
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understand each other.

I would like to mention Qatar as an example for this topic. Qatar rose from
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saw
dust to magnificent tall buildings. They are one of the deciding factor in the world’s economy. One main factor I like about their adaptation from
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other
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country
culture is equal rights for their women unlike Saudi
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having woman under a
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man
’s control. Qatari women are
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opportunity
to educate themselves and shine in their careers.

To conclude
, every
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good
and
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effects. We
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, I am not saying there is
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impacts
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also
negatives. A
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government
should support their
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people
and implement strong laws to
be followed
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IELTS essay Tourism is always a force for good which enables people of different countries to understand each other. ’ You should

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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