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Topic 1: Some people think international car-free days are an effective way of reducing air pollution; however, others think there are some other ways.

Topic 1: Some people think international car-free days are an effective way of reducing air pollution; however, others think there are some other ways. pla9
The ubiquity of cars is often considered as a major culprit of air quality degradation in many countries. To combat atmospheric pollution, many suggest that car-free days should be held internationally. However, I contend that these events may achieve little success, and there are more effective methods to preserve the atmosphere. On the one hand, car-free days is an important way to resolve the adulteration problem. Since a high proportion of exhausted gas is produced by cars, it is better if more people recognize and reduce their car driving time. As an alternative, it could be a greater help when individuals change their type of vehicle into some that are more friendly to the environment such as bike. Furthermore, by not using cars, we will not demand a huge amount of fuel; this leads to lesser demands on mineral exploitation. Consequently, the environment will not be polluted because of human needs. There are, in my opinion, better measures to minimise air pollution. One of them is constructing dedicated lanes for public means of transport. These lanes guarantee that public transport is relatively faster than individual vehicles in rush hours, which may encourage a majority of commuters to eschew their personal vehicles in favour of mass transit. The implication is that motor vehicle use may be reduced throughout the year, which exerts a longer-lasting impact on minimising traffic fumes than international car-free days may do. Another measure is levying a tax on carbon usage in all areas, including transport and industrial production. This measure has been adopted in several countries, including the United Kingdom, and has proven its effectiveness as a holistic approach to curtail emissions in all fields. In my view, those measures are all effective in addressing the problem of air pollution, but only to a certain extent. Such a problem needs to be dealt with by different approaches and I always feel that if there is only one way being implemented, it will not be enough.
The ubiquity of
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cars
is
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often
considered as a major culprit of air quality degradation in
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many
countries. To combat atmospheric pollution,
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many
suggest that car-free days should
be held
internationally
.
However
, I contend that these
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events
may achieve
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little
success, and there are more effective methods to preserve the atmosphere.

On the one hand, car-free days is an
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important
way to resolve the adulteration problem. Since a high proportion of exhausted gas
is produced
by
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cars
, it is better if more
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people
recognize and
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reduce
their
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car
driving time. As an alternative, it could be a greater
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help
when individuals
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change
their type of
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vehicle
into
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some
that are more friendly to the environment such as bike.
Furthermore
, by not using
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cars
, we will not demand a huge amount of fuel; this leads to lesser demands on mineral exploitation.
Consequently
, the environment will not
be polluted
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because
of human needs.

There are, in my opinion, better
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measures
to
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minimise
air pollution. One of them is constructing dedicated lanes for public means of transport. These lanes guarantee that public transport is
relatively
faster than individual
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vehicles
in rush hours, which may encourage a majority of commuters to eschew their personal
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vehicles
in
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favour
of mass transit. The implication is that motor
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vehicle
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use
may be
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reduced
throughout the year, which exerts a longer-lasting impact on
Possible spelling mistake. 'minimising' is British English.
minimising
traffic fumes than international car-free days may do. Another
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measure
is levying a tax on carbon usage in all areas, including transport and industrial production. This
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measure
has
been adopted
in several countries, including the United Kingdom, and has proven its effectiveness as a holistic approach to curtail emissions in all fields.

In my view, those
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measures
are all effective in addressing the problem of air pollution,
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but
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only
to a certain extent. Such a problem needs to
be dealt
with by
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different
approaches and I always feel that if there is
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only
one way
being implemented
, it will not be
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enough
.
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IELTS essay Topic 1: Some people think international car-free days are an effective way of reducing air pollution; however, others think there are some other ways.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
328 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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