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TOEFL Speaking Task 3Announcement from the school: Changing of the loan policy and increasing copy machines for the library. The maximum books that a student can checked out for one time is reduced from 30 to 10. Conversation: A male student and a female s v.1

TOEFL Speaking Task 3Announcement from the school: Changing of the loan policy and increasing copy machines for the library. The maximum books that a student can checked out for one time is reduced from 30 to 10. Conversation: A male student and a female s v. 1
It is undeniable that the production of rubbish has risen recently. I believe that one of the most crucial factors that plays an important role in this increase is overpopulation. This essay will discuss why is this happen and will explain some ways to reduce it. To begin with, overpopulation has led to significant dangers on environment that its effects can be shown on many well-beings on earth. The reason behind this is that as the number of people increase, their amounts of producing garbage will also increase. For instance, officials in China, announced that the country would be in a severe danger if no roles had taken into consideration to overcome this raise and thus many species would be under a fatal risk. However, governments should raise the awareness among their people and factories concerning the side effects of the tremendous amounts produced by garbage. The reason behind this is that many people do not know the consequences which might be resulted because of such amounts. In other words, many factories all around the globe still dump their sewage and non bio-degradable wastes such as plastic into the seas, which can have a negative impact on the creatures of these seas. To illustrate, a documentary on National Geographic showed how a turtle was suffering to death due to the large amounts of plastic ropes which had surrounded her body without any presence of anyone to help her. In conclusion, as overpopulation is often leading to the increase of garbage, governments should make extra efforts to raise up risks that can be resulted.
It is undeniable that the production of rubbish has risen recently. I believe that one of the most crucial factors that plays an
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role in this
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increase
is overpopulation. This essay will discuss why is this happen and will
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explain
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reduce
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begin
with, overpopulation has led to significant
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dangers
on environment that its effects can
be shown
on
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many
well-beings on earth. The reason behind this is that as the number of
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people
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increase
, their
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amounts
of producing garbage will
also
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increase
.
For instance
, officials in China, announced that the country would be in a severe
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danger
if no roles had taken into consideration to overcome this raise and
thus
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many
species would be under a fatal
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risk
.

However
,
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governments
should raise the awareness among their
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people
and factories concerning the side effects of the tremendous
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amounts
produced by garbage. The reason behind this is that
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many
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people
do not know the consequences which might
be resulted
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because
of such
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amounts
.
In other words
,
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many
factories all around the globe
still
dump their sewage and non bio-degradable wastes such as plastic into the seas, which can have a
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negative
impact on the creatures of these seas. To illustrate, a documentary on National Geographic
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showed
how a turtle was suffering to death due to the large
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amounts
of plastic ropes which had surrounded her body without any presence of anyone to
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help
her.

In conclusion
, as overpopulation is
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often
leading to the
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increase
of garbage,
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governments
should
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make
extra efforts to raise up
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risks
that can
be resulted
.
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IELTS essay TOEFL Speaking Task 3Announcement from the school: Changing of the loan policy and increasing copy machines for the library. The maximum books that a student can checked out for one time is reduced from 30 to 10. Conversation: A male student and a female s v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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