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TOEFL integrated writing: fuel-cell engines

TOEFL integrated writing: fuel-cell engines g58q1
The article states that the internal combustion engine should be replaced with hydrogen based fuel cell engine in cars and provides three reasons of supports. However, the professor explains that hydrogen based fuel cell engine is not a good option in replacement of internal combustion engine and refute each of the author's reasons. First, the reading claims that internal combustion engine relies upon petroleum products to works ie: on gasoline or diesel which is a finite source of energy and hydrogen can be derieved from renewable sources and easily available. The professor refutes this point by saying that hydrogen is not easily available in its required form. She states that hydrogen have to be extracted from its sources and have to be converted to liquid form and should be stored in in -200 celsius which is very difficult. Second, the article posits that internal combustion engine produce pollution by burning of oil which produces pollutant like carbon dioxide and claims that hydrogen fuel cell engine is a good option to eliminate this problem. However, the professor says that to extract pure desired form of hydrogen makes more pollution as this extraction requires burning of coals etc. Third, the reading says that hydrogen fuel cell engine will be less expensive and twice efficient than internal combustion engine. on the other hand, the professor opposes this point by explaining that there will be no cost saving as fuel cell engines parts need to be made of plantinum which is a very rare and expensive material.
The article states that the
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internal
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combustion
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engine
should
be replaced
with hydrogen based
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fuel
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cell
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engine
in cars and provides three reasons of supports.
However
, the
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professor
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explains
that hydrogen based
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fuel
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cell
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engine
is not a
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good
option in replacement of
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internal
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combustion
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engine
and refute each of the author's reasons.

First
, the reading claims that
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internal
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combustion
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engine
relies upon petroleum products to works
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ie
: on gasoline or diesel which is a finite source of energy and hydrogen can be
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derieved
from renewable sources and
easily
available. The
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professor
refutes this point by saying that hydrogen is not
easily
available in its required form. She states that hydrogen
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have to
be extracted
from its sources and
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have to
be converted
to liquid form and should
be stored
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in in
-200
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celsius
which is
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very
difficult.

Second, the article posits that
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internal
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combustion
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engine
produce pollution by burning of oil which produces pollutant like carbon dioxide and claims that hydrogen
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fuel
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cell
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engine
is a
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good
option to eliminate this problem.
However
, the
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professor
says that to extract pure desired form of hydrogen
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makes
more pollution as this extraction requires burning of coals etc.

Third, the reading says that hydrogen
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fuel
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cell
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engine
will be less expensive and twice efficient than
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internal
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combustion
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engine
.
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on
the other hand, the
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professor
opposes this point by explaining that there will be no cost saving as
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fuel
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cell
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engines
parts need to
be made
of
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plantinum
which is a
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very
rare and expensive material.

IELTS essay TOEFL integrated writing: fuel-cell engines

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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