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Today's school should teach their students how to survive financially in the world today. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

Today's school should teach their students how to survive financially in the world today. with this statement. BNRj
School education plays an essential role in every person's life. a number of individuals reckon that this is a responsibility of school teachers to teach their students about financial independence. I agree with this statement; however I believe that this is also a responsibility of their parents. This essay willintend to discuss my view points in the subsequent paragraphs. To commence with, there are numerous reasons why children should learn about Financially independence by school education. The first and foremost, children spend their quality of time in schools, hence, they can learn easily about Finances value through their subject. For example, government started a new subject, financial subject in a plethora of schools, consequently that children can learn about the value of money.
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education. The
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, they can learn
easily
about Finances value through their subject.
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a new subject, financial subject in a plethora of
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IELTS essay Today's school should teach their students how to survive financially in the world today. with this statement.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
123 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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