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Today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. Discuss the causes and solutions. v.6

Today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. Discuss the causes and solutions. v. 6
Quality of life represents how healthy human beings are living and how they are maintaining their living style, though it’s hard to believe that most living in the metropolitan cities people are getting rid of quality from their life cycles. There is a number of causes and solution which we are going to discuss in the upcoming paragraphs. Dealing with these cause it has been observed that there are many issues which divert the human mind nevertheless even force them to spend degraded life. Firstly, the Lifestyle of richest persons is one of the main influenced factors which generate tinkling in the mind of others to achieve these heights. As a result, people started giving more preference to money rather than to social life, it is also observed that these citizens even don’t have time for their family. There is an article published by Times magazine that a huge increase in people count has been observed those are living a life under debt that is provided either by banks or other independent firm just for fulfilling their materialistic dreams. There is one more concept turns out which states that the increased pressure of work schedule and target achievements of private companies affects the quality standard of the life cycle of metropolitans, hence they are getting away from their culture and family. What could be the situations can arise which act as the solution for these devastating issues? Firstly, proper planning in terms of finance has to be done by the family in together so they could lead a neat and tidy life as well a kind concern for saving ought to be the first preferences. Secondly, time schedule could be a laborious task, but it always gives you eternal happiness if you got a free time for oneself and family, even researchers believe that this time person can rejuvenate oneself from all the problems. Conclusively, I want to say that there is no doubt in a degraded life of metropolitan citizens due to a fast pace and eager to earn more in less time, but this could be manageable if proper planning has adopted by the person.
Quality of
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life
represents how healthy human beings are
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living
and how they are maintaining their
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living
style, though it’s
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hard
to believe that most
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living
in the metropolitan cities
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people
are getting rid of quality from their
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life
cycles. There is a number of causes and solution which we are going to discuss in the upcoming paragraphs.

Dealing with these cause it has
been observed
that there are
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many
issues which divert the human mind
nevertheless
even force them to spend degraded
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life
.
Firstly
, the Lifestyle of
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richest
persons is one of the main influenced factors which generate tinkling in the mind of others to achieve these heights.
As a result
,
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people
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started
giving more preference to money
rather
than to social
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life
, it is
also
observed that these citizens even don’t have
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time
for their family.

There is an article published by
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Times
magazine that a huge increase in
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people
count has
been observed
those are
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living
a
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life
under debt that
is provided
either by banks or other independent firm
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just
for fulfilling their materialistic dreams. There is one more concept turns out which states that the increased pressure of work schedule and target achievements of private
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companies
affects the quality standard of the
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life
cycle of metropolitans,
hence
they are getting away from their culture and family.

What could be the situations can arise which act as the solution for these devastating issues?
Firstly
, proper planning in terms of finance
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has to
be done
by the family in together
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so
they could lead a neat and tidy
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life
as well
a kind concern for saving ought to be the
first
preferences.
Secondly
,
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time
schedule could be a laborious task,
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but
it always gives you eternal happiness if you
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got
a free
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time
for oneself and family, even researchers believe that this
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time
person can rejuvenate oneself from all the problems.

Conclusively
, I want to say that there is no doubt in a degraded
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life
of metropolitan citizens due to a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
fast
pace and eager to earn more in less
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time
,
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but
this could be manageable if proper planning has adopted by the person.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. Discuss the causes and solutions. v. 6

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
357 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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