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Today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. Discuss the causes and solutions. v.20

Today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. Discuss the causes and solutions. v. 20
People living in cities are increasing rapidly these days. While the quality of life in metropolitans is diminishing gradually. This essay will discuss causes and solutions for decreasing better growth in urban areas. The two main reasons for reduced quality life in metro areas are air pollution and traffic problems. Even though cities are expanding significantly, air pollution levels are eventually increasing. For example, according to a survey the mankind living in these contaminated regions are suffering from serious critical illness issues. Besides this, the other cause is traffic congestion. Most of the people commute daily using their own vehicles instead of using public transport. For instance, humans in developing countries utilize personal cars to office rather than depending on transit to save time. The two major solutions to this situation are decentralization of development and increasing public transportation options. The development in a country should be distributed to different areas, despite restricting to only few towns. To illustrate, government should spread administration to different to various cities in a province or state. Next, the government should increase the number of buses and trains for easy commute to their residents. To elaborate, if there are more number of buses and trains people tend to utilize them since they feel comfortable and also to save money. Implementing these two solutions will improve the air condition and reduce the traffic issues. To summarize, pollution and transportation problems can be reduced by decentralization of development and improving public transits. The above essay has discussed the causes of bad quality of life in cities and the solutions for improvement.
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People
living in
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cities
are increasing
rapidly
these days.
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While
the quality of life in metropolitans is diminishing
gradually
. This essay will discuss causes and
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solutions
for decreasing better growth in urban areas.

The two main reasons for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
quality life in metro areas are air pollution and traffic problems.
Even though
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cities
are expanding
significantly
, air pollution levels are
eventually
increasing.
For example
, according to a survey the mankind living in these contaminated regions are suffering from serious critical illness issues.
Besides
this, the other cause is traffic congestion. Most of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
commute daily using their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
vehicles
instead
of using public transport.
For instance
, humans in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
developing countries
utilize personal cars to office
rather
than depending on transit to save time.

The two major
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
solutions
to this situation are decentralization of development and increasing public transportation options. The development in a country should
be distributed
to
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different
areas, despite restricting to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
few towns. To illustrate,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should spread administration to
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different
to various
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cities
in a province or state.
Next
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should increase the number of buses and trains for easy commute to their residents. To elaborate, if there are more number of buses and trains
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
tend to utilize them since they feel comfortable and
also
to save money. Implementing these two
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solutions
will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the air condition and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the traffic issues.

To summarize
, pollution and transportation problems can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
by decentralization of development and improving public transits. The above essay has discussed the causes of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
quality of life in
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cities
and the
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solutions
for improvement.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. Discuss the causes and solutions. v. 20

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
9
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 9.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 9.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 9.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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