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Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller?

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Education is the building block for a child's future. Schools are not only responsible for educating children but for making better humans. The school manages the child's overall development. In my opinion, it is better to have co-education rather than having separate schooling for girls and boys. From the inception itself, they will be acquainted with both boys and girls as people, and so there would be no difference planted in them. School is a significant part of a child's daily routine, till their growth years. The children learn and play and build their capabilities in school. A nursery and kindergarten are there for the kid's cognitive abilities. From grade one, they start to build on their interpersonal skills and interests, which become their goals and ambitions in the future. Being in a co-ed school, the kid will learn to be around another gender, and there will be a sense of equality from the beginning. In a co-ed school, the classes will be the same for both girls and boys and be it physical training or academics, and they will compete with each other on the same levels. The children will learn to understand the differences in other kids and will help each other grow. If the girls are better at a subject, the boys can learn from them, and vice-versa the boys can educate the girls in their weak classes. They will also learn to accept each other shortcomings and increase their understanding of each other. Educating boys and girls separately will put them in a comfort zone, and there can be differences later when they have to face the world together. Separate education is easier, as the kids are of the same gender and have similar problems mostly. The girls and boys will make their lives.
Education is the building block for a child's future.
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Schools
are not
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only
responsible for educating children
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but
for making better humans. The
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school
manages the child's
overall
development. In my opinion, it is better to have co-education
rather
than having separate schooling for
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girls
and
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boys
. From the inception itself, they will
be acquainted
with both
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boys
and
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girls
as
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people
, and
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so
there would be no difference planted in them.

School is a significant part of a child's daily routine, till their growth years. The children
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learn
and play and build their capabilities in
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school
. A nursery and kindergarten are there for the kid's cognitive abilities. From grade one, they
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start
to build on their interpersonal
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skills
and interests, which become their goals and ambitions in the future. Being in a co-ed
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school
, the kid will
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learn
to be around another gender, and there will be a sense of equality from the beginning.

In a co-ed
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school
, the classes will be the same for both
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girls
and
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boys
and be it physical training or academics, and they will compete with each
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other
on the same levels. The children will
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learn
to understand the differences in
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other
kids and will
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help
each
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grow. If the
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girls
are better at a subject, the
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boys
can
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learn
from them, and vice-versa the
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boys
can educate the
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girls
in their weak classes. They will
also
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learn
to accept each
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other
shortcomings and increase their understanding of each other.

Educating
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boys
and
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girls
separately
will put them in a comfort zone, and there can be differences later when they
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have to
face the world together. Separate education is easier, as the kids are of the same gender and have similar problems
mostly
. The
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girls
and
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boys
will
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make
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IELTS essay Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
298 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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