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Today, more and more people like to choosing to live and work in other country after they finish their studies in their own country.

Today, more and more people like to choosing to live and work in other country after they finish their studies in their own country. OwldG
Today, more and more people like to choosing to live and work in other country after they finish their studies in their own country. I believe that the advantages of doing so completely outweigh the disadvantages and this essay will show the reasons why. Firstly, the most important reasons which might be earned a lot of money or get a higher salary. With the same job, in Viet Nam you can buy a 60, 000 house after 10 years working, but in America, after ten years working, you also can buy it. It faster twice times so many people go to abroad for this reason Besides it, go aboard also have a negative. As people move overseas, they must far from their hometown, far from their family, friends, which most familiar with they. They might be homesickness. In conclusion, I personally think that the advantages of live and work in other country outweigh the disadvantages.
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, more and more
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people
like to choosing to
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and work in other country after they finish

their studies in their
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country. I believe that the advantages of doing
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completely outweigh the

disadvantages and this essay will
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the reasons why.

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, the most
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a higher salary.

With the same job, in
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Nam you can
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buy
a 60, 000
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after 10 years working,
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in America,

after ten years working, you
also
can
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it. It faster twice times
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overseas, they
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hometown, far from their family, friends, which most familiar
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IELTS essay Today, more and more people like to choosing to live and work in other country after they finish their studies in their own country.

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  American English
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155 words
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