It is true that cell phones and computers play crucial roles in our lives. Some people
claim that this is the reason for declining communication skills. While I accept that modern
technologies make our lives more convenient, I believe that they have some negative effects on
our communication ability.
On the one hand, there are several advantages of using these electronic devices. The
biggest advantage is that cell phones and computers allow people to communicate with each
other more quickly and conveniently. For example, thanks to the Internet, managers can utilize
computers to contact their partners from other countries. As a result, they can save more time and
money to do other vital work of their business. Furthermore, many mobile phones and computers
now have Skype and therefore we can talk to friends and family who are far away. We can
actually see them, whereas before we had to rely on expensive long-distance calls or letters
which took ages to arrive.
On the other hand, this trend may have some drawbacks. Firstly, although people can
make many new friends via the Internet easily, they rarely meet and talk directly with each other.
This will let people be under illusions about their acquaintances in the virtual world. Secondly,
because of extreme focusing on cell phones or computers, people no longer want to spend time
with their true friends and their families. My close friend, for instance, is so addicted to chatting
and playing games on her smart phone that she ignores everyone when we gather and talk about
funny stories together.
In conclusion, although modern technologies bring us numerous benefits, it is true that
the communication ability of people will be improved if they restrict their usage of mobile
phones and computers.
It is true that cell
phones
and computers play crucial roles in our
lives
.
Some
people
claim
that this is the reason for declining communication
skills
. While I accept that
modern
technologies
make
our
lives
more convenient, I believe that they have
some
negative
effects on
our
communication ability.
On the one hand, there are several advantages of using these electronic devices. The
biggest
advantage is that cell
phones
and computers
allow
people
to communicate with each
other
more
quickly
and
conveniently
.
For example
, thanks to the Internet, managers can
utilize
computers
to contact their partners from other countries.
As a result
, they can save more time
and
money
to do other vital work of their business.
Furthermore
,
many
mobile
phones
and computers
now
have Skype and
therefore
we can talk to
friends
and family who are far away. We
can
actually
see
them, whereas
before
we had to rely on expensive long-distance calls or letters
which
took ages to arrive.
On the other hand
, this trend may have
some
drawbacks.
Firstly
, although
people
can
make
many
new
friends
via the Internet
easily
, they rarely
meet
and talk
directly
with each other.
This will
let
people
be under illusions about their acquaintances in the virtual world.
Secondly
,
because
of extreme focusing on cell
phones
or computers,
people
no longer want to spend time
with
their true
friends
and their families. My close
friend
,
for instance
, is
so
addicted to
chatting
and playing games on her smart
phone
that she
ignores
everyone when we gather and talk about
funny
stories together.
In conclusion
, although modern technologies bring us numerous benefits, it is true that
the communication ability of
people
will be
improved
if they restrict their usage of mobile
phones
and computers.
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14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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