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Today, many large cities are developing through tourism. It is a type of business that has both good and bad effects on the local population.

Today, many large cities are developing through tourism. It is a type of business that has both good and bad effects on the local population. n9WP
Task 2 Today, many large cities are developing through tourism. It is a type of business that has both good and bad effects on the local population. Tourists should be at least a little interested in the history and culture of the country they are visiting. Because everyone’s worldview is different. First, they must undergo a serious medical examination. The reason is that various viruses are currently coming from foreign countries. Besides, the local people are also affected by their attitude, behavior, and actions. Second, it must respect local and historical traditions and culture. Of course, this helps them better communicate quickly with locals and places. It is also interesting to them. True, you may sometimes hear that tourists have disrespected our values and our historical monuments. I think they will be taken seriously in due course. But as with the good and bad side of everything, Tourism is a good material business for the local people. It also helps young people. For example, tourism can help or motivate young people to study or work in foreign countries. Again, the locals are starting to pay attention to the appreciation of their culture as well as their historical sites. For example, I am from Samarkand and when I went there last year, I was amazed by the cleanliness and beauty of the place. Because Samarkand has many ancient monuments and is the most developed place for tourism. Overall, I believe that tourism has many benefits for everyone. However, it is vital that people still think about protecting tourist locations and reducing the undesirable impacts of tourist behavior.
Task 2

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Today
,
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many
large cities are developing through
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tourism
. It is a type of business that has both
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good
and
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bad
effects on the
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local
population.

Tourists should be at least a
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little
interested in the history and culture of the country they are visiting.
“Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
everyone’s worldview is
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different
.
First
, they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
undergo a serious medical examination. The reason is that various viruses are
currently
coming from foreign countries.
Besides
, the
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local
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people
are
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
by their attitude, behavior, and actions. Second, it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
respect
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local
and historical traditions and culture.
Of course
, this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
them better communicate
quickly
with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
locals
and places. It is
also
interesting to them. True, you may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
hear that tourists have disrespected our values and our historical monuments. I
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think
they will
be taken
seriously
in due course.

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But
as with the
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good
and
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bad
side of everything,
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Tourism
is a
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good
material business for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
. It
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
young
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people
.
For example
,
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tourism
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
or motivate young
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to study or work in foreign countries. Again, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
locals
are starting to pay attention to the appreciation of their culture
as well
as their historical sites.
For example
, I am from Samarkand and when I went there last year, I
was amazed
by the cleanliness and beauty of the place.
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Because
Samarkand has
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many
ancient monuments and is the most developed place for tourism.

Overall
, I believe that
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tourism
has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
benefits for everyone.
However
, it is vital that
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people
still
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
about protecting tourist locations and reducing the undesirable impacts of tourist behavior.
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IELTS essay Today, many large cities are developing through tourism. It is a type of business that has both good and bad effects on the local population.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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