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Today many companies use advertisements on the Internet. Why? What problems does it create?

Today many companies use advertisements on the Internet. Why? What problems does it create? 10GM

Today, adverts on the internet is utilize by most companies. I will show why they promote their products with this way and this method create the problems. A number of companies in order to widen the volumes of their sales utilize from advertisements on the internet. With this way, not only local people will their products, but also the world population will be able to recognize them. That is why, numerous companies invest much money to the their digital marketing. Thus, their finance can be increased through the internet since more people will see and buy their produces. However, this method of add leads to some problems. Firstly and foremost, companies’ adverts on the internet can be attacked by hackers because they are able to receive the products, which they want, without any payment. This problem also causes destroying of the websites of companies. While corporations create website in order to adds on the internet, this problem forces firms to rise the protection. Secondly, companies’ customers, who purchase by online, can decrease since this is related to the site’s speed. Site running slow can cause customers’ boredom and they can exit easily from there. For instance, Amazon, which is the best online shopping in the world, noticed that their buyers have reduced due to delaying 1 second and they immediately figure out this issue. Therefore, Their sales have boosted again after solving this problem. In conclusion, the most companies use to advert so that to rise their sales, nevertheless, there are some obstacles, such as cyber attacks and website’s speed.

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. I will This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstrateportrayindicatedisplay
show
 why they promote their products with this way and this method create the problems.

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companies
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only
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 the world population will be able to recognize them. That is
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buy
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companies
. While corporations create website in order to Did you mean "add"?add
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, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgroupclubcommunityteampartyassociation
companies’
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 they can exit easily
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, Amazon, which is the best online shopping in the world, noticed that their buyers have This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alleviated
reduced
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 they immediately figure out this issue. Therefore
, Their sales have boosted again after solving this problem.

In conclusion
, the most You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgroupclubcommunityteampartyassociation
companies
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use to
 advert This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
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 that to rise their sales, nevertheless
, there are This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 obstacles, such as This word is normally spelled as one.cyberattacks
cyber attacks
 and website’s speed. 