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To learn effectively, children need to eat a healthy meal at school. How true is this statement? Whose responsibility is it to provide food for school children?

In addition to parents, schools play an important role in the mental and physical development of children. Therefore, schools need to create the best conditions for educating students. In my view, I believed that healthy eating was one of the key factors contributing to children’s ability to learn. on one hand, the link between a healthy eating habit and reading efficiency is clear. If children are not strong enough, they may be distracted from class or even in a bad mood. This means that delicious and nutritious food for children is necessary for children to boost their strength and mood and help their brain develop. Also, to get more benefits for students, snacks that are high in sugar and fat should replace fruits or nutritional supplements. Schools and parents are responsible for providing balanced nutrition for children. As a result, schools need to have some strategies to support not only the development of children, but also education, but also good nutrition. In addition, parents need a healthy diet for their children, which is related to the classification of their impact on children’s lives. In contrast, there are many factors that depend on children’s ability to learn, especially a healthy lifestyle. Take physical activity as an example, playing sports after school is not only a way to have fun, but also helps to improve their health and reduce the likelihood of illness. Similarly, good sleep can also combine concentration with children’s memory. In conclusion, food affects children’s cognitive effectiveness and healthy lifestyles. Schools and parents need to share this burden to succeed.
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important
role in the mental and physical development of
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children
.
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,
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schools
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need
to create the best conditions for educating students. In my view, I believed that
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healthy
eating was one of the key factors contributing to
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children’s
ability to learn.
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on
one hand, the link between a
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healthy
eating habit and reading efficiency is
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children
are not strong
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enough
, they may
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class
or even in a
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mood. This means that delicious and nutritious food for
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children
is necessary for
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children
to boost their strength and mood and
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help
their brain develop.
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, to
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get
more benefits for students, snacks that are high in sugar and
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fat
should replace fruits or nutritional supplements.

Schools and
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parents
are responsible for providing balanced nutrition for
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children
.
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,
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schools
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need
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strategies to support not
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the development of
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also
education,
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also
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good
nutrition.
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parents
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diet for their
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children
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factors that depend on
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children’s
ability to learn,
especially
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lifestyle. Take physical activity as an example, playing sports after
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school
is not
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only
a way to have fun,
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also
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helps
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improve
their health and
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reduce
the likelihood of illness.
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good
sleep can
also
combine concentration with
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children’s
memory.

In conclusion
, food affects
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children’s
cognitive effectiveness and
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healthy
lifestyles.
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Schools
and
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parents
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need
to share this burden to succeed.
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IELTS essay To learn effectively, children need to eat a healthy meal at school. How true is this statement? Whose responsibility is it to provide food for school children?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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