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To increase the sales author has given three different basic principles while speaker stated that new research findings are against traditional basic principles.

To increase the sales author has given three different basic principles while speaker stated that new research findings are against traditional basic principles. QLno9
To increase the sales author has given three different basic principles while speaker stated that new research findings are against traditional basic principles. This research was conducted by collaborating the efforts of scientist and near about 500 different company. The speaker contradicts the points regarding to the principles, as stated in passage by giving advanced research conclusions. Firstly, he points out that, author says, more calls will give more orders for this purpose sales person supposed to contact more people. However, according to speaker this is misconception. In reality, he explains that if sales person is spending more time on calling customers then their will be less time for preparation for the same. Furthermore, reduced preparation time will affect the quality of calls. Secondly, he opposes the second principle given in the passage regarding calling higher position authorities as well. he clarifies that in practice, it is quiet contrary. sales will be same if we are contacting any position authority. He explains that to call higher position more preparation will be needed and again same problem of preparing less will occur. Thirdly he denies the validity of the point that was given in the passage with regards to deadline to increase the sales as well as creating sense of urgency. Due to this according to speaker there will be less time for concerns of customers, summarizing and benefit explanation. Speaker casts doubts by saying that preparation time is important. Hence in conclusion, speaker lucidly substantiates his points of view with cogency.
To increase the
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author has
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basic
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principles
while speaker stated that new research findings are against traditional basic
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principles
. This research
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by collaborating the efforts of scientist and near about 500
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company
. The speaker contradicts the
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, as stated in passage by giving advanced research conclusions.

Firstly
, he
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points
out that, author says, more calls will give more orders for this purpose
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sales
person supposed to contact more
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people
.
However
, according to speaker this is misconception. In reality, he
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explains
that if
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sales
person is spending more
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time
on calling customers then their will be less
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time
for
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preparation
for the same.
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,
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reduced
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preparation
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time
will affect the quality of calls.

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, he opposes the second
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principle
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given
in the passage regarding calling higher position authorities
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clarifies that in practice, it is quiet contrary.
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sales
will be same if we are contacting any position authority. He
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explains
that to call higher position more
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preparation
will
be needed
and again same problem of preparing less will occur.

Thirdly
he denies the validity of the
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point
that was
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given
in the passage
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with regards to
deadline to increase the
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sales
as well
as creating sense of urgency. Due to this according to speaker there will be less
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time
for concerns of customers, summarizing and benefit explanation.

Speaker casts doubts by saying that
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preparation
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is
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important
.
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Hence
in conclusion
, speaker
lucidly
substantiates his
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points
of view with cogency.
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IELTS essay To increase the sales author has given three different basic principles while speaker stated that new research findings are against traditional basic principles.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
251 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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