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The speaker contradicts the points with regards to competition as stated in the passage by giving reasons and examples.

The speaker contradicts the points with regards to competition as stated in the passage by giving reasons and examples. donQX
The speaker contradicts the points with regards to competition as stated in the passage by giving reasons and examples. according to passage competition is good and has several benefits whereas lecture is challanging by explaining harmful effects of it. Firstly he points out that as per passage increase in competition will increase motivation. athlets perform well ehen they are given chance to train or compet with higher qualfied athlets. however this, according to speakeker is misconception. In reality he explicits that most of studies showed that competition has increased performance anxiety with increasing chances of cleating. Furthermore, self esteem will be lowered Secondly, speaker oppses the information given in the passage. Competitors push each other to excel and due to this productivity will be increased. Number of books read in the class having competition has given higher results than other classroom having no race for reading. it is quiet contrary because in one study cooperation has given higher results than competition in. 25% of study group said that there is no differennce between both. Majority of group showed that cooperation is more effective to increase productivity. Thirdly he denies the validity of the point that was avered in the passage with regards to having fun while playing group competition games like quiz, science project, and spelling bees. however speaker said that in past it was fun but as of now addiction of winning game took over fun. Only winners have fun and loosers don’t. Last but not least speaker suggests that by keeeping fun we can avoid bad outcome. Hence in conclusion, speaker lucidly substantiates his points of view with cogency.
The speaker contradicts the
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points
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with regards to
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competition
as stated in the
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passage
by giving reasons and examples.
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according
to
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passage
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competition
is
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good
and has several benefits whereas lecture is
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challanging
by explaining harmful effects of it.

Firstly
he
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points
out that as per
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passage
increase in
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competition
will increase motivation.
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athlets
perform well
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ehen
they are
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given
chance to train or
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compet
with higher
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qualfied
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athlets
.
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however
this, according to
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speakeker
is misconception. In
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reality he
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explicits
that
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most of studies
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showed
that
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competition
has increased performance anxiety with increasing chances of
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cleating
.
Furthermore
,
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self esteem
will
be lowered


Secondly
, speaker
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oppses
the information
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given
in the
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passage
. Competitors push each other to excel and due to this productivity will
be increased
. Number of books read in the
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class
having
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competition
has
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given
higher results than other classroom having no race for reading.
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it
is
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quiet
contrary
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because
in one study cooperation has
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given
higher results than
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competition
in. 25% of study group said that there is no
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differennce
between both. Majority of group
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showed
that cooperation is more effective to increase productivity.

Thirdly
he denies the validity of the
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point
that was
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avered
in the
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passage
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with regards to
having
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fun
while playing group
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competition
games like quiz, science project, and spelling bees.
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however
speaker said that in past it was
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fun
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but
as of
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now
addiction of winning game took over
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fun
.
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Only
winners have
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fun
and
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loosers
don’t.

Last
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but
not
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least
speaker suggests that by
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keeeping
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fun
we can avoid
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bad
outcome.
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Hence
in conclusion
, speaker
lucidly
substantiates his
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points
of view with cogency.
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IELTS essay The speaker contradicts the points with regards to competition as stated in the passage by giving reasons and examples.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
271 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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