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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. goyd
Environmental problem has been our problem since years ago. So many constructions that to make a building or something else. The impact of the buildings has so many advantages or disadvantages. Such as extinction of the animal or plant. But it also create advantages such as an easy way to produce somethings or fix the finansial of this country. Oxygen has been produced by the trees. If those contructions of buildings continue, maybe the land will be our last hope in the future. Because some of the buildings need a huge land. Moreover our forest in this world has decreased. We cannot blame our government of this problem. The government has considered the advantages or disadvantages for our country. Whatever it takes to develope our country. The environmental problem such as the loss of plants or animals is not the only one. The other problems are plant waste, pollution, and trash everywhere. People always hunt the animal to create things for other people. This case will make many losses of animals. The extinction of animal will make new findings of the research. Like cloning has been founded years ago. The other problems such as plant waste, pollution, and trash also not good for our healthy. It will damage our breathe system in our body. It also can be difficult to find higienist water. It has been contaminated by the plant waste. There are so many disadvantages of the environmental problem in this world. If you lose some of the plants, you cannot breathe the fresh air again.
Environmental
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problem
has been our
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problem
since years ago.
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So
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many
constructions that to
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make
a
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building
or something else. The impact of the
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buildings
has
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so
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many
advantages or disadvantages. Such as extinction of the
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animal
or
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plant
.
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But
it
also
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create
advantages such as an easy way to produce somethings or
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fix
the
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finansial
of this country.

Oxygen has
been produced
by the trees. If those
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contructions
of
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buildings
continue, maybe the land will be our last hope in the future.
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Because
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some of the
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buildings
need a huge land.
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Moreover
our forest in this world has decreased.

We cannot blame our
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government
of this
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problem
. The
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government
has considered the advantages or disadvantages for our country. Whatever it takes to
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develope
our country.

The environmental
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problem
such as the loss of
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plants
or
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animals
is not the
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only
one. The other
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problems
are
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plant
waste, pollution, and trash everywhere.
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People
always hunt the
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animal
to create things for other
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people
. This case will
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make
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many
losses of
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animals
. The extinction of
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animal
will
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make
new findings of the research. Like cloning has
been founded
years ago.

The other
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problems
such as
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plant
waste, pollution, and trash
also
not
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good
for our healthy. It will damage our
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breathe
system in our body. It
also
can be difficult to find
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higienist
water.
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It
has
been contaminated
by the
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plant
waste.

There are
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so
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many
disadvantages of the environmental
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problem
in this world. If you lose
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some of the
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plants
, you cannot breathe the fresh air again.
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IELTS essay Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
257 words
5.5
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