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To be labelled a ‘Work of Art’, a painting, sculpture or other art form should display certain qualities that are unique. However, over the past century there has been a decline in the quality of prize-winning artwork and it is now possible for quite ordinary pieces of art to be labelled ‘masterpieces ’ while true work of art pass unnoticed. Do you agree or disagree? v.7

To be labelled a ‘Work of Art’, a painting, sculpture or other art form should display certain qualities that are unique. However, over the past century there has been a decline in the quality of prize-winning artwork and it is now possible for quite ordinary pieces of art to be labelled ‘masterpieces ’ while true work of art pass unnoticed. v. 7
Nowadays, the taste of artworks has been declining among people, that they try to consider an ordinary art as a masterpiece. Although, this is factual, but the real works or the real masterpieces are unnoticed and unrecognised. I completely agree with this viewpoint because the paintings or sculptures of the past had a uniqueness, which is completely lacking in the present days. Firstly, the number of people who like and admire paintings and sculptures have decreased over the period of time. Therefore, any painting that has little colours is appreciated and liked by the people and they try to buy them by spending more money, so that they could decorate the place with these works in order to make it attractive. Moreover, people have less time in their busy schedule to appreciate or admire an art, so they are not taking efforts to realise the worth of it. For example, a decade ago, there were numerous art exhibitions where many people used to visit and buy them at auctions, but now this happens once in a year, because the visitors are less, real paintings are unappreciated and lack of less painters and sculptures. Secondly, due to lack of acknowledgment, famous and talented artists are leaving this profession and choosing other careers in their life to earn money and to become successful. Moreover, artworks are taught in schools as an extra-curricular activity and there is no added importance to this, because the number of competitions is very less, so nobody is interested in joining this. Similarly, in the past, there was a bachelor’s course in the arts, but now the importance has been reduced very drastically. For example, my friend is a good painter at school and she won many prizes in competitions and she always wanted to become a great artist, but unfortunately, she landed into another career due to deprivation of encouragement. In conclusion, determining the true artwork and awarding those unique works is a task that should be done very carefully in order to appreciate the work or genius from ordinary works. Moreover, all these can be done with the help of the government and if they take an initiative then everything will fall in its place automatically.
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people
, that they try to consider an ordinary
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art
as a masterpiece. Although, this is factual,
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but
the real works or the real masterpieces
are unnoticed
and
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unrecognised
. I completely
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agree
with this viewpoint
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because
the
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paintings
or sculptures of the past had a uniqueness, which is completely lacking in the present days.

Firstly
, the number of
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people
who like and admire
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paintings
and sculptures have decreased over the period of time.
Therefore
, any
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painting
that has
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little
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colours
is appreciated
and liked by the
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people and
they try to
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buy
them by spending more money,
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so
that they could decorate the place with these works in order to
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make
it attractive.
Moreover
,
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people
have
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less
time in their busy schedule to appreciate or admire an
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art
,
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so
they are not taking efforts to
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realise
the worth of it.
For example
, a decade ago, there were numerous
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art
exhibitions where
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many
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people
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used
to visit and
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buy
them at auctions,
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but
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now
this happens once in a year,
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because
the visitors are
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less
, real
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paintings
are unappreciated
and lack of
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less
painters and sculptures.

Secondly
, due to lack of acknowledgment,
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famous
and talented artists are leaving this profession and choosing other careers in their life to earn money and to become successful.
Moreover
, artworks
are taught
in schools as an extra-curricular activity and there is no
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added
importance to this,
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because
the number of competitions is
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very
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less
,
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so
nobody
is interested
in joining this.
Similarly
, in the past, there was a bachelor’s course in the
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arts
,
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but
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now
the importance has been
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reduced
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very
drastically
.
For example
, my friend is a
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good
painter at
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school and
she won
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many
prizes in
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competitions and
she always wanted to become a great artist,
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but
unfortunately, she landed into another career due to deprivation of encouragement.

In conclusion
, determining the true artwork and awarding those unique works is a task that should
be done
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very
carefully
in order to appreciate the
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work
or genius from ordinary works.
Moreover
, all these can
be done
with the
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help
of the
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government
and if they take an initiative then everything will fall in its place
automatically
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay To be labelled a ‘Work of Art’, a painting, sculpture or other art form should display certain qualities that are unique. However, over the past century there has been a decline in the quality of prize-winning artwork and it is now possible for quite ordinary pieces of art to be labelled ‘masterpieces ’ while true work of art pass unnoticed. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
370 words
8.5
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