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throughout the history male leaders always leaders to violence and conflict if a society is governed by female leaders it will be more peaceful to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

In the history of mankind there have been many records of violence and conflicts inthe form of wars. Some people think that if a society were governed by femaleleaders, it would be more peaceful. However, if we look into the past history we canget numerous examples when there have been wars and conflicts even during therule of women rulers. So, I disagree with the statement. If we had female only rulers, we probably wouldn’t be alive today. Sure most warswere caused by men, but that is only because more than 90% of rulers were men. Female rulers have also caused wars and their fraction is a lot higher than malerulers. For example, during the Tang Dynasty, the first female ruler of China, WuZetian who was well-known for her tyranny and cruelty, launched a series of wars toexpand the territory of the empire. This didn’t happen only in China. It was QueenVictoria who invaded India, China and many other countries in close succession. Even our late Prime Minister, Indira Gandhi, led India in a war against neighbouringPakistan which resulted in the creation of Bangladesh, formerly East Pakistan. It is understandable if you say that generally, women are more affectionate, thoughtful and gentle as compared with men. They are also less ambitious andaggressive. However, politics is decided by the interest. If you are the leader of asociety, you surely have the required leadership qualities regardless of the gender. Apparently, leaders, male or female, will have to make a decision according tospecial interest. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that, a society will not necessarily becomemore peaceful merely because it is governed by a female leader because, essentially, there is no difference between female and male leaders when it comes to politics.
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WuZetian
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other countries in close succession. Even our late Prime Minister, Indira Gandhi, led India in a
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IELTS essay throughout the history male leaders always leaders to violence and conflict if a society is governed by female leaders it will be more peaceful with this opinion?

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