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This set of the material in the both reading and lecture is about archeology and its importance in the United Kingdom in which there are many precious and valuable artifacts found by archeologists.

This set of the material in the both reading and lecture is about archeology and its importance in the United Kingdom in which there are many precious and valuable artifacts found by archeologists. OVnYk
This set of the material in the both reading and lecture is about archeology and its importance in the United Kingdom in which there are many precious and valuable artifacts found by archeologists. The reading provides three pieces of evidence indicating that since the twentieth century, the government of the United Kingdom has paid less attention to this field. The lecturer, nonetheless, refutes the author's claims by offering advantages of the new rules for the archeology field, approved by this government. First, the reading posits that many construction companies are destroying such valuable sites, without being aware of this fact that those places contain valuable artifacts, to construct buildings for the growing populations in this country. The lecturer, however, takes this view that according to the new rule, all contructing companies are require to hire archelogists to examine the site before being constructed by those companies. If the archeologist becomes interested in doing more examination, the company will not be allowed to resume its construction. Second, the reading brings up this view that due to lack of financial supports from the government, archeologists have faced economic problems. In contrast, the speaker disputes this point by arguing that all construction companies have to pay for archelogists to examine the land. In this case, they are required to hire archeologists for initial examinations. Therefore, this means constantly financial supports from those companies not from the government. Third, the reading shed light on this view that inadequacy of archeology jobs have made archeologists change their careers and find other professions. The lecturer casts doubt on this point due to the fact that this rules has created a wide variety of archeological professions such as examining sites, preserving artifacts, doing researchers, processing data, and writing reports. Thus, the number of professions have been increased by this law.
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and lecture is about archeology and its importance in the United Kingdom in which there are
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precious and valuable artifacts found by archeologists. The
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reading
provides three pieces of evidence indicating that since the twentieth century, the
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government
of the United Kingdom has paid less attention to this field. The lecturer, nonetheless, refutes the author's claims by offering advantages of the new
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rules
for the archeology field, approved by this
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government
.

First
, the
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posits that
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construction
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companies
are destroying such valuable sites, without being aware of this fact that those places contain valuable artifacts, to construct buildings for the growing populations in this country. The lecturer,
however
, takes this view that according to the new
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rule
, all
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contructing
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companies
are
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archelogists
to examine the site
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being constructed
by those
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companies
. If the archeologist becomes interested in doing more examination, the
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will not be
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allowed
to resume its construction.

Second, the
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reading
brings up this view that due to lack of financial supports from the
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government
, archeologists have faced economic problems.
In contrast
, the speaker disputes this point by arguing that all construction
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companies
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have to
pay for
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archelogists
to examine the land.
In this case
, they
are required
to hire archeologists for initial examinations.
Therefore
, this means
constantly
financial supports from those
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companies
not from the
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government
.

Third, the
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reading
shed light on this view that inadequacy of archeology jobs have made archeologists
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change
their careers and find other professions. The lecturer casts doubt on this point due to the fact that this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
has created a wide variety of archeological professions such as examining sites, preserving artifacts, doing researchers, processing data, and writing reports.
Thus
, the number of professions have
been increased
by this law.
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IELTS essay This set of the material in the both reading and lecture is about archeology and its importance in the United Kingdom in which there are many precious and valuable artifacts found by archeologists.

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6.0
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