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These days, consuming fast food has increased immensely. There are several companies are producing high sugary foods and drinks those are detrimental for human health

These days, consuming fast food has increased immensely. There are several companies are producing high sugary foods and drinks those are detrimental for human health 6ad9r
These days, consuming fast food has increased immensely. There are several companies are producing high sugary foods and drinks those are detrimental for human health. However, it is believed that containing sugar products ought be costly. I completely agree with the given topic, In this essay a couple of crucial points could be discussed. To bagin with, eating high level of sugary meals and Jink foods lead increase a plenty of health disease, such as heart illment, diabates and so on. Moreover, because of overeating these foods children become obese which are extremely risky for their health. For instance, In Cannada, majority of parents are not concern about their child health that can allow kids to consume more fast food. As a result, It could be hazardous for young people. Furthermore, process foods contain high level of fat, which makes individuals so vulnerable, afterthat, the nations become lazy that is quite unexpected. Therefore, they are used to be unproductive that will be negative impact for the state. On the other hand, to reduce the consumption of unhealthy diet some actions shoud be taken by the government. First and foremost, whether the authority might impose extra taxes on them or the prices of fast food could be increased. Subsequently, people will be reluctant to purchase sugary goods. To illustrate, if the prices of junk meals are not budget friendly, a number of underprivileged citizens cannot buy these foods. Besides, some noticeable social awareness programs could be organised so that masses can messsages that these foods can make long term health issues. Thus, society will encourage to avoid unhealthy meals. In conclusion, though sugary foods are delicious to consume, it could be neglected because of having sound health. while I strongly believe that authority ought to demotivated the citizens to grab and these foods must be aboandoned from our diet.
These days, consuming
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fast
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food
has increased
immensely
. There are several
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companies
are producing high
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sugary
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foods
and drinks those are detrimental for human
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health
.
However
, it
is believed
that containing sugar products
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ought be
costly. I completely
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agree
with the
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given
topic, In this essay a couple of crucial points could
be discussed
.

To
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bagin
with, eating high level of
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sugary
meals and Jink
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foods
lead increase a
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plenty
of
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health
disease, such as heart
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illment
,
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diabates
and
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so
on.
Moreover
,
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because
of overeating these
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foods
children become obese which are
extremely
risky for their
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health
.
For instance
, In
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Cannada
,
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majority of
parents are not concern about their child
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health
that can
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allow
kids to consume more
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fast
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food
.
As a result
, It could be hazardous for young
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people
.
Furthermore
, process
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foods
contain high level of
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fat
, which
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makes
individuals
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so
vulnerable,
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afterthat
, the nations become lazy
that is
quite unexpected.
Therefore
, they are
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used to be
unproductive that will be
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negative
impact for the state.

On the other hand
, to
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reduce
the consumption of unhealthy diet
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some
actions
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shoud
be taken
by the
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government
.
First
and foremost, whether the authority might impose extra taxes on them or the prices of
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fast
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food
could
be increased
.
Subsequently
,
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people
will be reluctant to
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purchase
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sugary
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goods
. To illustrate, if the prices of junk meals are not budget friendly, a number of underprivileged citizens cannot
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buy
these
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foods
.
Besides
,
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some
noticeable social awareness programs could be
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organised
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so
that masses can
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messsages
that these
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foods
can
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make
long term
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health
issues.
Thus
, society will encourage
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to avoid
unhealthy meals.

In conclusion
, though
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sugary
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foods
are delicious to consume, it could
be neglected
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because
of having sound
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health
.
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while
I
strongly
believe that authority ought to demotivated the citizens to grab and these
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foods
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must
be
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aboandoned
from our diet.
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IELTS essay These days, consuming fast food has increased immensely. There are several companies are producing high sugary foods and drinks those are detrimental for human health

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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