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There should be fine on high sugar drinks and foods. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

There should be fine on high sugar drinks and foods. 3W2yN
There are several health associated complications which are mainly because of high sugary intakes served as in the form of drinks and food. By raising its price and implicit the extra charges, it will be beneficial for people to have healthy life and it can also spread awareness about its hazardous consumption. In accordance with the statement, at present, there is marked imbalanced life cycle regarding food habits and people are more prone to eat unhealthy and unhygienic items. The food packages which has carried higher level of sugar is harmful to human health. As it can create many digestive problem and can cause further illness in long run. Taking diabetes, high blood pressure, for an example. Due to over consumption of sweets and cold drinks, there is higher chance of getting these diseases at very early age of mankind. Therefore, it is better to exclude the higher sugar intakes when it pays health over money. Subsequently, for any middle class person it will be difficult to spend money on such expensive products that charges more amount. Moreover, he or she will eventually extract these products from daily livings. Latter on, it will create a greater loss for any company for holding such health risk manufacturing of products. To cite an example, soft drinks such as Thums up, sprite, these all are high sugary drinks and people generally rely on these products on every occasional and seasonal function to celebrate. By raising its price, company will automatically decrease it's production due to lower level of consumerism and afterwards it will affect to the company. To summarize, we have seen critical issues regarding fitness just by adding high level of sugary intakes as in the form of drinks and foods. It is advisable to charge heavy on such products to make life more fir physically.
There are several
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health
associated complications which are
mainly
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because
of
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high
sugary intakes served as in the form of
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drinks
and
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food
. By raising its price and implicit the extra charges, it will be beneficial for
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people
to have healthy life and it can
also
spread awareness about its hazardous consumption.

In accordance with the statement, at present, there
is marked
imbalanced life cycle regarding
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food
habits and
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people
are more prone to eat unhealthy and unhygienic items. The
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food
packages which has carried higher level of sugar is harmful to human
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health
. As it can create
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digestive problem and can cause
further
illness in long run. Taking diabetes,
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high
blood pressure, for an example. Due to over consumption of sweets and
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cold
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drinks
, there is higher chance of getting these diseases at
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very
early age of mankind.
Therefore
, it is better to exclude the higher sugar intakes when it pays
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health
over money.

Subsequently
, for any middle
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class
person it will be difficult to spend money on such expensive
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products
that charges more amount.
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, he or she will
eventually
extract these
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products
from daily livings. Latter on, it will create a greater loss for any
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company
for holding such
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health
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risk
manufacturing of
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products
. To cite an example, soft
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drinks
such as
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Thums
up, sprite, these all are
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high
sugary
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drinks
and
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people
generally
rely on these
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products
on every occasional and seasonal function to celebrate. By raising its price,
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company
will
automatically
decrease
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production due to lower level of consumerism and afterwards it will affect to the
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company
.

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, we have
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seen
critical issues regarding fitness
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by adding
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high
level of sugary intakes as in the form of
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drinks
and
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foods
. It is advisable to charge heavy on such
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products
to
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make
life more fir
physically
.
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IELTS essay There should be fine on high sugar drinks and foods.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
5.5
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