Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

There is no doubt that because of globalization and advancements in technology we can communicate better with people in different parts of the world.

There is no doubt that because of globalization and advancements in technology we can communicate better with people in different parts of the world. Nowadays, social networks, such as Facebook and Instagam, have a significant role in our lives as they are part of the routine of the majority of people in almost all societies. Although there are disadvantages of having these networking, the benefits of using these apps outweigh the negatives. It is my firm belief that these sites and apps contribute positively to people's life. I feel this way for several reasons which I will explain in the following paragraphs. To begin with, globalization makes people more connected and it decreases physical barriers. For these reasons, it is indispensable that we can easily communicate with people from different countries. My experience has taught me that social media is the best way of achieving this. In 2010, I traveled around Asia and I made friends. Unfortunately, it was really difficult to sustain a relationship with the local people after returning home. At that time the only way of connecting with them was by phone. It was not practical and it was expensive, so I lost contact with all the people that I met. Some years later, I traveled around South America and I also met many people. However, this time I could build a long term relationship with them because of social media. My new friends and I became friends on Facebook and when I was back home I was easily sending them photos and messages. I think that it is incredible and necessary to have this kind of contact and the best way of doing this is by social media. Moreover, I definitely think that as a society is really important to be connected to people from different parts of the world. This way we are more informed about what is happening around us and we can think not only at the local level, but also in the world as one. My father said that before social media, he was immersed just in the local culture. After creating an account on Facebook, he started to follow international leaders that were sharing information about how to make better decisions. After getting their tips, my father started to apply this advice in his routine. After a while, many people around him also did it, and most of the people in his town have a new behavior which impacted positively to their lives. To conclude, I strongly believe that if you are not using social media, you are losing the opportunity to build strong relationships with people that are far from you, and you're totally limited to information in the area that you live.
There is no doubt that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of globalization and advancements in technology we can communicate better with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
parts of the world. Nowadays,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
networks, such as Facebook and
Possible spelling mistake found.
Instagam
, have a significant role in our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
as they are part of the routine of the majority of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
in almost all societies. Although there are disadvantages of having these networking, the benefits of using these apps outweigh the negatives. It is my firm belief that these sites and apps contribute
positively
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
's life. I feel this way for several reasons which I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
in the following paragraphs.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, globalization
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
more
Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
connected and
it decreases physical barriers. For these reasons, it is indispensable that we can
easily
communicate with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
from
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
countries. My experience has taught me that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
is the best way of achieving this. In 2010, I traveled
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
around
Asia and I made friends. Unfortunately, it was
really
difficult to sustain a relationship with the local
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
after returning home. At that time the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
way of connecting with them was by phone. It was not
Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
practical and
it was expensive,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I lost contact with all the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
that I met.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
years later, I traveled
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
around
South America and I
also
met
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
.
However
, this time I could build a long term relationship with them
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
. My new friends and I became friends on Facebook and when I was back home I was
easily
sending them photos and messages. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that it is incredible and necessary to have this kind of contact and the best way of doing this is by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
media.

Moreover
, I definitely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that as a society is
really
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
to
be connected
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
from
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
parts of the world. This way we are more informed about what is happening
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
around
Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
us and
we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
at the local level,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
in the world as one. My father said that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
, he
was immersed
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
in the local culture. After creating an account on Facebook, he
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
to follow international leaders that were sharing information about how to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
better decisions. After getting their tips, my father
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
to apply this advice in his routine.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
After
a while,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
around
him
also
did it, and most of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
in his town have a new behavior which impacted
positively
to their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
.

To conclude
, I
strongly
believe that if you are not using
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
, you are losing the opportunity to build strong relationships with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
that are far from you, and you're
totally
limited to information in the area that you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay There is no doubt that because of globalization and advancements in technology we can communicate better with people in different parts of the world.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
453 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts