Firstly, the media has been disappointingly ineffective so far in shining a light on this state of affairs. The plight of hundreds of millions of people, who are trapped in the vicious circle of extreme poverty, is ignored by the investigative television journalists. Some honest in-depth reporting on their part would, however, educate the public about how desperate the conditions for some are, and this might spur governments to finally take measures to alleviate the suffering of these unfortunate people.
In the same way, the third paragraph could then be:
Additionally, the schools need to face up to their responsibility here. Despite the fact that their students need to be taught about their own societies, the anguish of children in other parts of the world, who are much worse off, should not be ignored. The underlying social reasons for these conditions needs to be explained, so as to awaken the desire on the part of the students to get involved in movements to eradicate poverty.
And then the final paragraph could be:
Nevertheless, education is the slow train to progress, whereas what are needed now are immediate results. Only the media can deliver the kind of impact the problem is cying out for, and only the media can communicate with the people who can effect such a change.
Firstly
, the media has been
disappointingly
ineffective
so
far in shining a light on this state of affairs. The plight of hundreds of millions of
people
, who
are trapped
in the vicious circle of extreme poverty, is
ignored
by the investigative television journalists.
Some
honest in-depth reporting on their part would,
however
, educate the public about how desperate the conditions for
some
are, and this might spur
governments
to
finally
take measures to alleviate the suffering of these unfortunate
people
.
In the same way
, the third paragraph could then be:
Additionally
, the schools need to face up to their responsibility here. Despite the fact that their students need to
be taught
about their
own
societies, the anguish of children in other parts of the world, who are much worse off, should not be
ignored
. The underlying social reasons for these conditions needs to be
explained
,
so as to
awaken the desire on the part of the students to
get
involved in movements to eradicate poverty.
And then the final paragraph could be:
Nevertheless
, education is the slow train to progress, whereas what
are needed
now
are immediate results.
Only
the media can deliver the kind of impact the problem is
cying
out for, and
only
the media can communicate with the
people
who can effect such a
change
.