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The use of corporal punishment (physically hitting students) in schools is in decline, yet it should be used to improve behaviour. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

hitting students in the schools are in decreasing order they should be motivated to change their activities rather than physical torture. It#039; s true, an effective approach for changing student studies is not only the physical punishment whether with such attempts the students stop going to school. The punishment may hamper the brain development of a student, the different way of treating can shift a student cycle.
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IELTS essay The use of corporal punishment (physically hitting students) in schools is in decline, yet it should be used to improve behaviour. with this statement?

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