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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these view and give your own opinion.

Sharing information with or without charge is now controversial. Some people advocate the free spreading of valuable knowledge because of its benefits to individuals and society, but I hold the opinion that some vital and priceless information should not be shared without any fee. On the one hand, people support the sharing of science, business and academic world – related information because of some reasons. Firstly, as for individuals, free access to this information will facilitate their work and study. For instance, if a successful businessman shares experience about setting up and running business effectively, many others can learn from it and start their own business on the right way. Secondly, the society has a knowledgeable workforce since knowledge is exchanged and people can access ideas that are worth sharing. For example, the programs introducing more effective and attractive teaching methods can be accessed by different teachers who then apply them in their classes. On the other hand, I agree with the view that the access to some crucial and valuable information should be charged. The initial reason is that some pieces of information are priceless because they are discovered after endless efforts and hard work of a person or even a team. Charging a fee can not only show the gratitude to their contribution but also enhance the responsibility of users. For instance, to create many online vocabulary sets which help learners remember and apply new words, a teacher works dedicatedly for hours. Therefore, it will be unfair if this work is shared freely. Furthermore, some information is too important to be widely spread. For instance, if the instruction about producing nuclear weapons is leaked, many terrorists or criminals can use it illegally. In conclusion, although some people are in favour of sharing academic knowledge freely, I strongly believe that some information should not be shared because of its importance and value.
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with or without charge is
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now
controversial.
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Some
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people
advocate the free spreading of valuable knowledge
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because
of its benefits to individuals and society,
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but
I hold the opinion that
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some
vital and priceless
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information
should not
be shared
without any fee.

On the one hand,
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people
support the
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sharing
of science, business and academic world
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–
related
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information
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because
of
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some
reasons.
Firstly
, as for individuals, free access to this
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information
will facilitate their
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work
and study.
For instance
, if a successful businessman shares experience about setting up and running business
effectively
,
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many
others can learn from it and
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start
their
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own
business on the right way.
Secondly
, the society has a knowledgeable workforce since knowledge
is exchanged
and
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people
can access
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ideas
that are worth
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sharing
.
For example
, the programs introducing more effective and attractive teaching methods can
be accessed
by
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different
teachers who
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then
apply them in their classes.

On the other hand
, I
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agree
with the view that the access to
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some
crucial and valuable
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information
should
be charged
. The initial reason is that
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some
pieces of
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information
are priceless
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because
they
are discovered
after endless efforts and
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hard
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work
of a person or even a team. Charging a fee can not
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only
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show
the gratitude to their contribution
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but
also
enhance the responsibility of users.
For instance
, to create
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many
online vocabulary sets which
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help
learners remember and apply new words, a teacher works
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dedicatedly
for hours.
Therefore
, it will be unfair if this
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work
is shared
freely
.
Furthermore
,
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some
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information
is too
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important
to be
widely
spread.
For instance
, if the instruction about producing nuclear weapons
is leaked
,
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many
terrorists or criminals can
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use
it
illegally
.

In conclusion
, although
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some
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people
are in
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favour
of
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sharing
academic knowledge
freely
, I
strongly
believe that
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some
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information
should not
be shared
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because
of its importance and value.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

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4 paragraphs
313 words
6.0
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