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The title was a turtle that was born and dreamed with the sea.

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A turtle is named Nick and he wants to discover in the sea. After growing up, he will leave the house so that he can begin his journey. In the sea, he meets a turtle that jack is trucking in the net. Moreover, he sees the trash everywhere led to it is destroying his dream due to the fact Nick imagines an environment such as no garbage, no oil of a huge number of boats. If humans know control behavior, everything will become good better and the animals will not die for our mistakes. Through above the story, nick wants to talk that every human helps the environment also contributes to building our earth.
A turtle
is named
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Nick and
he wants to discover in the sea. After growing up, he will
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leave
the
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house
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so
that he can
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begin
his journey. In the sea, he meets a turtle that jack is trucking in the net.
Moreover
, he
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sees
the trash everywhere led to it is destroying his dream due to the fact Nick imagines an environment such as no garbage, no oil of a huge number of boats. If humans know control behavior, everything will become
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
better and the animals will not
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die
for our mistakes. Through above the story, nick wants to talk that every human
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helps
the environment
also
contributes to building our earth.
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IELTS essay The title was a turtle that was born and dreamed with the sea.

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  American English
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114 words
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