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The temperature and sunshine hours

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The table and the graph illustrate the rate of UV rays in hours and the average monthly degree annually in three different cities. The orange line on the line graph represents Sydney. Likewise, the yellow line describes the temperature in London. Lastly, the purple line presents New York’s temperature. The table demonstrates the yearly hours of sun heat from the three cities. Overall, it can easily be seen on the table that the city to have the longest hour of sunlight is New York. However, the country to have the least amount of sun ray is London. On the line graph the country to start off the year with the highest temperature is Sydney. On the contrary New York starts off the year with the lowest amount of temperature. New York proves to have the most sunshine hour with a total of 2535 hours per year. Following with the city that has animal amount of sun ray is london with only 1180 hours annually. The city that start off the year with the hottest temperature is sydney with around 26 degrees. On the country, New York started the year with the coolest temperature at below 5 degrees. On July London cited its highest heat at 20 degree and as well as New York which nearly reached 30 degrees.
The table and the graph illustrate the rate of UV rays in
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in three
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cities
. The orange
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on the
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graph represents Sydney.
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, the yellow
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describes
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in London.
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presents
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New
York’s
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temperature
. The table demonstrates the yearly
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of sun heat from the three cities.

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on the table that the city to have the longest
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hour
of sunlight is
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New
York.
However
, the country to have the least amount of sun ray is London. On the
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graph the country to
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with the highest
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is Sydney.
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New
York
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with the lowest amount of temperature.

New York proves to have the most sunshine
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with a total of 2535
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is
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sydney
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. On the country,
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New
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with the coolest
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at below 5
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IELTS essay The temperature and sunshine hours

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
218 words
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