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The statement is generally one to two pages discussing what you have to offer the program and what you wish to get out of the program. It should include a brief description of your field of interest, related background, desired area of study and research emphasis/career goals.

The statement is generally one to two pages discussing what you have to offer the program and what you wish to get out of the program. It should include a brief description of your field of interest, related background, desired area of study and research emphasis/career goals. B2a9
since high school, I have developed a keen interest in mathematics and technical programming fields, which turned into a passion, resulting in learning and using a number of programming languages, as well as various analytics tools, such as SQL, C# and SPSS. With this passion, I helped to get the ISO 9001 certification for Adam Hospital in 2012. Recently, I have supported Alghanim Industries, the largest international company in the Gulf area, in the development of many applications for brands, such as Costa and Slim Chicken, and I even received a team award for that in 2019. With a professional work experience of almost 10 years in various fields of business and corporate companies, I consider myself to be a facilitator between IT and business. I have an exceptional ability to understand any business process extremely quickly, meaning I can identify the required IT solutions. In other words, I have a strong understanding of the fundamentals of business and technology, along with the urge to learn and a craving for challenges. To work as a professional data analyst, I need to be well trained in other analytics tools, software such as R and Python, as well as obtain in-depth knowledge of advanced statistical techniques. Thus, it is with great enthusiasm that I feel compelled to apply for an MS in Data Science at your university. I especially desired to study for my master’s degree at this university for numerous particular reasons. First I appreciate its reputation in research field and its exceptional quality of education. Second, the comprehensive courses provided in this program cover all areas that I need to excel in the field of my passion, such as advanced statistics, R & Python, and machine learning. Remarkably, the teaching staff at this university are dedicated and exceptional educators, with most of them being graduates from various prestigious universities. Third, the diversity of the university's faculty staff, and students will enrich my life and educational experience. I feel it will help me to gain a deeper and better understanding of various cultures. This will certainly enhance my communication skills and help me to build strong and effective relationships. From my experience, success in business does not rely only on knowledge, skills, or experience, but it also depends heavily on connecting with others. One of my future goals is to work as a data intelligence analyst in an international non-government organization, where I work closely with teams from different countries, or where I might work and reside in a foreign country. Studying at this university will be an excellent opportunity to gain practical knowledge and get prepared. Additionally, its location in New York will give me a great chance to get internships in top-tier organizations. Undoubtedly, it is true that data science is not an easy field to get into. It is challenging and needs a lot of effort and dedication. Furthermore, there are plenty of professionals in this field with similar sets of skills. However, having a deep understanding of business and doing a relevant master’s degree from a prominent research university such as yours will ensure my success and even set me apart from others. After graduation, I aim to work as a data scientist for a leading tech company. After getting sufficient experience, I dream of working as a data intelligence analyst a non-government organization like the UN, where I can help in both saving millions of lives and improving living conditions for poor nations. Non-profit organizations use analytics to raise their fundraising efforts, build predictive models and optimize the allocation of funds. Thus, I will have an excellent opportunity to work at the UN after graduation. This will be the greatest achievement I have ever made in my life. In the long-term, I have a plan to get my Ph. D. degree and to work as a business consultant. As stated above, I have built a strong foundation for myself through my study and work experience and I wish to take it further and get complete proficiency in this field. Therefore, acquiring an MS in Data Science is a step in the right direction. This is exactly what probed me to pursue a Masters of Data Science, which will be the stepping stone towards the heights that I wish to reach in the field of Data Science
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since
high school, I have developed a keen interest in mathematics and technical programming
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fields
, which turned into a passion, resulting in learning and using a number of programming languages,
as well
as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
various
analytics tools, such as SQL, C# and
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SPSS
. With this passion, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the ISO 9001 certification for Adam Hospital in 2012. Recently, I have supported
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Alghanim
Industries, the largest international
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
in the Gulf area, in the development of
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many
applications for brands, such as Costa and Slim Chicken, and I even received a team award for that in 2019. With a professional
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work
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experience
of almost 10 years in
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various
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fields
of
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business
and corporate
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companies
, I consider myself to be a facilitator between IT and
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business
. I have an exceptional ability to understand any
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business
process
extremely
quickly
, meaning I can identify the required IT solutions.
In other words
, I have a strong understanding of the fundamentals of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
business
and technology, along with the urge to learn and a craving for challenges. To
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work
as a professional
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data
analyst, I need to be
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well trained
in other analytics tools, software such as R and Python,
as well
as obtain in-depth knowledge of advanced statistical techniques.

Thus
, it is with great enthusiasm that I feel compelled to apply for an MS in
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Data
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Science
at your
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university
. I
especially
desired to study for my master’s degree at this
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university
for numerous particular reasons.

First
I appreciate its reputation in research
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field
and its exceptional quality of education. Second, the comprehensive courses provided in this program cover all areas that I need to excel in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
field
of my passion, such as advanced statistics, R & Python, and machine learning.
Remarkably
, the teaching staff at this
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university
are dedicated
and exceptional educators, with most of them being graduates from
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various
prestigious
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universities
. Third, the diversity of the university's faculty staff, and students will enrich my life and educational
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experience
. I feel it will
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help
me to gain a deeper and better understanding of
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various
cultures. This will
certainly
enhance my communication
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skills
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me to build strong and effective relationships. From my
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experience
, success in
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business
does not rely
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only
on knowledge,
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skills
, or
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experience
,
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but
it
also
depends
heavily
on connecting with others. One of my future goals is to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
as a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
data
intelligence analyst in an international non-
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
organization, where I
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work
closely
with teams from
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different
countries, or where I might
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work
and reside in a foreign country. Studying at this
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university
will be an excellent opportunity to gain practical knowledge and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
prepared.
Additionally
,

its location in New York will give me a great chance to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
internships in top-tier organizations.

Undoubtedly
, it is true that
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data
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science
is not an easy
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field
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
into. It is challenging and needs
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a lot of
effort and dedication.
Furthermore
, there are
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plenty
of professionals in this
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field
with similar sets of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
.
However
, having a deep understanding of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
business
and doing a relevant master’s degree from a prominent research
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university
such as yours will ensure my success and even set me apart from others.

After graduation, I aim to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
as a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
data
scientist for a leading tech
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
. After getting sufficient
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experience
, I dream of working as a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
data
intelligence analyst a non-
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
organization like the UN, where I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
in both saving millions of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
and improving living conditions for poor nations. Non-profit organizations
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
analytics to raise their fundraising efforts, build predictive models and optimize the allocation of funds.
Thus
, I will have an excellent opportunity to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
at the UN after graduation. This will be the greatest achievement I have ever made in my life. In the long-term, I have a plan to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
my
The more common abbreviation of the term 'philosophiae doctor' is "Ph.D.".
Ph. D.
degree and to
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work
as a
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business
consultant.

As stated above, I have built a strong foundation for myself through my study and
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work
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experience
and I wish to take it
further
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
complete proficiency in this
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field
.
Therefore
, acquiring an MS in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Data
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Science
is a step in the right direction. This is exactly what probed me to pursue a Masters of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Data
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Science
, which will be the stepping stone towards the heights that I wish to reach in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
field
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Data
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Science
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IELTS essay The statement is generally one to two pages discussing what you have to offer the program and what you wish to get out of the program. It should include a brief description of your field of interest, related background, desired area of study and research emphasis/career goals.

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
719 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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