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The single mom in the city

The single mom in the city LbAXp
Today was a bad day for me. I accidentally bumped into a woman while serving at the restaurant. Everyone in the room was taken aback, and the woman grumbled to the restaurant management after that. The manager accepted full responsibility, and that night he met with me personally and told me, "You got fired. ". I couldn't sleep all night because I felt ashamed of myself and whisper to myself "why do these bad things happen to me"
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was a
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bad
day for me. I
accidentally
bumped into a woman while serving at the restaurant. Everyone in the room
was taken
aback, and the woman grumbled to the restaurant management after that. The manager
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accepted
full responsibility, and that night he met with me
personally
and
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told
me,
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"
You
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got
fired.
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"
. I couldn't sleep all night
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because
I felt ashamed of myself and whisper to myself
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"
why do these
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bad
things happen to me
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IELTS essay The single mom in the city

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
77 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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