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The reading passage claims that scholars are investigating a project sending humans to the mars as well as the moon.

The reading passage claims that scholars are investigating a project sending humans to the mars as well as the moon. e58YO

The reading passage claims that scholars are investigating a project sending humans to the mars as well as the moon. But it may create some problems owing to the fact that it is far away than the moon and the project might be impossible at this time. However, the lecturer finds all the ideas dubious and presents some evidence to refute them all. First, the author embraces the idea that mission to the mars will take two years and supply foods, water, and oxygen is a hard task to do in comparison with the moon mission. In contrast, the lecturer underlines the idea that astronauts can rely on hydroponics. In fact, they can grow some plants in water, which require less space. In this way, not only can they recycle wastewater and drink it but also can use from oxygen released by these plants. The author also asserts that astronauts on Mars are in the zero-gravity environment of space and it might create some deleterious effects on their bodies, muscle mass, and bone density. On the contrary, the professor brings up the idea that many astronauts spend more time on some space stations and they use several techniques to cope with this situation like regular exercises. Finally, as set forth by the author space radiations emitted by the sun also might have negative effects on astronauts because there is no magnetic shield to protect astronauts like the shield preserve people on the earth. Conversely, the speaker dismisses this issue due to the fact that these radiations are not dangerous all the time. In fact, they put people's health into danger occasionally. Also, space crafts could be equipped with special instruments. That being so, astronauts can stay in shielded areas in time where the radiations are severe.

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some
 evidence to refute them all.

First
, the author embraces the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withconceptinterpretationdesignsensebeliefintention
idea
 that mission to the The planet and the god are written with uppercase. 'mars' refers to the verb 'mar' meaning to spoil, or the plural of the noun 'mar' meaning blemishes.Mars
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hard
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idea
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astronauts
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fact
, they can grow This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
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space
. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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use
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astronauts
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space
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some
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many
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astronauts
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some
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space
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use
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Finally
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space
 radiations emitted by the sun also
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negative
 effects on You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpilotcosmonaut
astronauts
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because
 there is no magnetic shield to protect You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpilotcosmonaut
astronauts
 like the shield preserve This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 on the earth. Conversely
, the speaker dismisses this issue due to the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcasematterlawexperienceevidence
fact
 that these radiations are not This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:hazardousrisky
dangerous
 all the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpointgenerationpastsecondturnspace
time
. In You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcasematterlawexperienceevidence
fact
, they put This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
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danger
occasionally
. Also
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space
 crafts could be equipped
 with special instruments. That being This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
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astronauts
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time where
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