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Humans arrived in the Kaliko Islands about 7,000 years ago, and within 3,000 years most of the large mammal species that had lived in the forests of the Kaliko Islands were extinct. Previous archaeological findings have suggested that early humans general

Humans arrived in the Kaliko Islands about 7, 000 years ago, and within 3, 000 years most of the large mammal species that had lived in the forests of the Kaliko Islands were extinct. Previous archaeological findings have suggested that early humans general xmP9y
The author of the argument purportedly highlights that the major reason of extinction of mammal species is human's hunting when they arrived in Kaliloe Island 7000 years ago. However, the premises upon which he puts his claim are fallacious. The first assumption that lacks some semblance of truth and can be overtly impugned is that humans arrived in Kaliloe by 7000 years ago and by 3000 years many species extinct enormously. However, it does not lend credence to the argument since there are many reasons that could result in extinction and the author does not provide any information about extinction. In fact, climate change, the paucity of foods, natural disasters like earthquake or flood and so forth, may play a consequential role in the extinction of mammal species. Indeed, there is no cogent reason to prove allegedly that human intervention is the only factor of mammal extinction. The author also attributes that archaeologists have found majorities of a site that represent bones of fishes and prove that early humans relied on fish and hunting. Although it might seem tenable at a face, it has some defects since there would many reasons for remaining of bones. Indeed, there is a possibility that fishes died because of water contamination or drought. These two factors are enough to die out the population of any species. Alongside that maybe ecological mutation be the other reason for fishes' bones, who knows? Even if human relied on fishes, it is not logical to assume that they feed on fish for thousands of years. Putting the two previous assumptions aside, there is still room for doubt. As set forth by the author researchers have discovered simple tools like stone knives that early people used for hunting. Nevertheless, the rationale behind this premise could be challenged since there might be another purpose to use stone knives. Maybe they used this tools in order to protect themselves against attacks, or maybe religious value, who knows? Also, we all know that hunting needs many skills and the author does not provide any data about early humans' skills. Maybe they did not have enough skill to hunt and used stone knives just for other purposes. Having scrutinized the premises, a logical conclusion that can be drawn is that the author has ignored the number of assumption, the presence of which could strengthen the author's claim.
The
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of the argument
purportedly
highlights that the major
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of
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extinction
of mammal species is human's
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hunting
when they arrived in
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Kaliloe
Island 7000 years ago.
However
, the premises upon which he puts his claim are fallacious.

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first
assumption that lacks
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semblance of truth and can be
overtly
impugned is that
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humans
arrived in
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Kaliloe
by 7000 years ago and by 3000 years
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many
species extinct
enormously
.
However
, it does not lend credence to the argument since there are
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many
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reasons
that could result in
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extinction
and the
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author
does not provide any information about
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extinction
. In fact, climate
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change
, the paucity of foods, natural disasters like earthquake or flood and
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so
forth, may play a consequential role in the
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extinction
of mammal species.
Indeed
, there is no cogent
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reason
to prove allegedly that
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human
intervention is the
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only
factor of mammal extinction.

The
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also
attributes that archaeologists have found majorities of a site that represent bones of fishes and prove that early
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humans
relied on fish and
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hunting
. Although it might seem tenable at a face, it has
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some
defects since there would
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many
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reasons
for remaining of bones.
Indeed
, there is a possibility that fishes
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died
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because
of water contamination or drought. These two factors are
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enough
to
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die
out the population of any species. Alongside that maybe ecological mutation be the other
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reason
for fishes' bones, who knows? Even if
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human
relied on fishes, it is not logical to assume that they feed on fish for thousands of years.

Putting the two previous assumptions aside, there is
still
room for doubt. As set forth by the
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author
researchers have discovered simple tools like stone knives that early
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people
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used
for
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hunting
.
Nevertheless
, the rationale behind this premise could
be challenged
since there might be another purpose to
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use
stone knives. Maybe they
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used
this tools in order to protect themselves against attacks, or maybe religious value, who knows?
Also
, we all know that
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hunting
needs
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many
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skills
and the
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author
does not provide any data about early humans'
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skills
. Maybe they did not have
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enough
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skill
to hunt and
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used
stone knives
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just
for other purposes.

Having scrutinized the premises, a logical conclusion that can
be drawn
is that the
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author
has
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ignored
the number of assumption, the presence of which could strengthen the author's claim.

IELTS essay Humans arrived in the Kaliko Islands about 7, 000 years ago, and within 3, 000 years most of the large mammal species that had lived in the forests of the Kaliko Islands were extinct. Previous archaeological findings have suggested that early humans general

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