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The reading passage and lecture both discussed about live in other planets.

The reading passage and lecture both discussed about live in other planets. NrWgg
The reading passage and lecture both discussed about live in other planets. The author of the passage states that it is possible for human to live in mars and moon. On the other hand due to the lack of living condition living on Venus is inhospitable. However, the lecturer challenges the author's reasons and proposes three reasons. First off, the author of the passage highlights that pressure on Venus is extremely higher than pressure at earth's surface. Not having been convinced, the lecturer points that base on physical facts, pressure are much lower at surface. So, based on those facts pressure at surface of Venus are more likely to be equal as pressure at surface of earth. In this case, there is no danger in order to land in Venus. Moreover, the author of the passage declares that Venus hardly contains water and oxygen and the planet's atmosphere include mostly carbon dioxide, sulfuric acid and nitrogen. On the contrary, the lecturer asserts that although compound materials such as carbon or sulfuric acid contain at Venus, by using chemical process we can provide amount of water and oxygen. Finally, the author of the passage contends that there are dense clouds on the Venus's atmosphere which block the sunlight reaching the surface and limited the use of solar energy. By marked contrast, the lecturer does not approve of author's third reason and say that clouds in that areas are not very thick that sunlight can be reflect and get to surface. Therefore, cells can collect enough sunlight and use for electricity.
The reading
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passage
and lecture both discussed about
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live
in other planets. The
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author
of the
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passage
states that it is possible for human to
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live
in
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mars
and moon.
On the other hand
due to the lack of living condition living on
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Venus
is inhospitable.
However
, the
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lecturer
challenges the author's reasons and proposes three reasons.

First
off, the
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author
of the
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passage
highlights that
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pressure
on
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Venus
is
extremely
higher than
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pressure
at earth's
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surface
. Not having
been convinced
, the
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lecturer
points that base on physical facts,
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pressure
are much lower at
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surface
.
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So
, based on those facts
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pressure
at
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surface
of
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Venus
are more likely to be equal as
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pressure
at
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surface
of earth.
In this case
, there is no
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danger
in order to land in Venus.

Moreover
, the
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author
of the
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passage
declares that
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Venus
hardly contains water and oxygen and the planet's atmosphere include
mostly
carbon dioxide, sulfuric acid and nitrogen.
On the contrary
, the
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lecturer
asserts that although compound materials such as carbon or sulfuric acid contain at
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Venus
, by using chemical process we can provide amount of water and oxygen.

Finally
, the
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author
of the
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passage
contends that there are dense clouds on the Venus's atmosphere which block the sunlight reaching the
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surface
and limited the
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use
of solar energy. By marked contrast, the
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lecturer
does not approve of author's third reason and say that clouds in that areas are not
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very
thick that sunlight can be
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reflect
and
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get
to
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surface
.
Therefore
, cells can collect
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enough
sunlight and
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use
for electricity.
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IELTS essay The reading passage and lecture both discussed about live in other planets.

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4 paragraphs
259 words
6.0
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