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When Stanley Park first opened, it was the largest, most heavily used public park in town. It is still the largest park, but it is no longer heavily used. Video cameras mounted in the park's parking lots last month revealed the park's drop in popularity:

When Stanley Park first opened, it was the largest, most heavily used public park in town. It is still the largest park, but it is no longer heavily used. Video cameras mounted in the park's parking lots last month revealed the park's drop in popularity: YLmrn
When Stanley Park first opened, it was the largest, most heavily used public park in town. It is still the largest park, but it is no longer heavily used. Video cameras mounted in the park's parking lots last month revealed the park's drop in popularity: the recordings showed an average of only 50 cars per day. In contrast, tiny Carlton Park in the heart of the business district is visited by more than 150 people on a typical weekday. An obvious difference is that Carlton Park, unlike Stanley Park, provides ample seating. Thus, if Stanley Park is ever to be as popular with our citizens as Carlton Park, the town will obviously need to provide more benches, thereby converting some of the unused open areas into spaces suitable for socializing. Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted. === 50 cars per day does not indicate a drop in popularity - some people might walk or skateboard to the park - some people might park outside, or at a nearby parking lot Ample benches is not necessarily what caused Carlton Park to be popular - Maybe it is because its location, which is in the heart of the business district - Maybe it has more social activities Even if providing benches does help increase popularity of park, adding more benches does not necessarily convert some of the unused open areas into spaces suitable for socializing - People do not necessarily use benches to socialize, they might simply rest - Since it is a large park, it could be potentially difficult to find another person sitting close with you
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an average of
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50 cars per day.
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Park
in the heart of the business district
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by more than 150
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people
on a typical weekday. An obvious difference is that Carlton
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Park
, unlike Stanley
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, provides ample seating.
Thus
, if Stanley
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is ever to be as popular with our citizens as Carlton
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, the town will
obviously
need to provide more
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benches
, thereby converting
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some of the
unused open areas into spaces suitable for socializing.

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explain
how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

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50 cars per day does not indicate a drop in popularity

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might walk or skateboard to the park

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some
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might
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outside, or at a nearby parking lot

Ample
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is not
necessarily
what caused Carlton
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Park
to be popular

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Maybe it is
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its location, which is in the heart of the business district

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Maybe it has more social activities

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benches
does
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help
increase popularity of
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park
, adding more
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benches
does not
necessarily
convert
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some of the
unused open areas into spaces suitable for socializing

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People
do not
necessarily
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use
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benches
to socialize, they might
simply
rest

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Since it is a large
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park
, it could be
potentially
difficult to find another person sitting close with you
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IELTS essay When Stanley Park first opened, it was the largest, most heavily used public park in town. It is still the largest park, but it is no longer heavily used. Video cameras mounted in the park's parking lots last month revealed the park's drop in popularity:

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298 words
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