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the proportion of spending time

the proportion of spending time Lq5o8

Overall, boys and children spent much more time in music, although women were interested in food with the same percent, but killed less time among four. in 1998, women and adults loved food much rather than others group of age which is 39%, 25% respectively. It is noticeable that boys were less interested around 9%. Though boys and children are keen on electronic equipment rather than women and girls.

Overall
, boys and children spent much more time in music, although women were interested
 in food with the same percent, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 killed less time among four.

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterIn
in
 1998, women and adults This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :admiredadored
loved
 food much rather
 than others group of age which is 39%, 25% respectively
. It is noticeable that boys were less interested around 9%. Though boys and children are keen on electronic equipment rather
 than women and girls. 