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The present water supply system

The illustration shows the present water conservation and distribution system in Australia. In this article, we will cover the present water distribution supply in detail and make observations that will make the system more effective for future applications. This section provides details on the present water supply system. The present water supply system consists of a dam which is used to store the water which is collected from rains. Once the dams are filled with water the pure water is supplied to households, factories, and cities for use. The wastewater from the commercial sectors is sent to the water treatment plant for treatment. Any water from the storms is supplied to the rivers. Although the supply system is a comprehensive water supply and storage system the stormwater released into the rivers is not treated to ensure clean water is being released, this could lead to pollution of the rivers. Dams are generally built to hold the river water and collect rainwater but it seems the dam is independent of the river, hence building a dam along the river would allow Australia to have a better supply of water. Also, the treated wastewater can be supplied back for commercial use or released into the river. The present water supply system is effective and makes good use of the water ensuring ample availability to the country, a few issues can be pointed out which if corrected for the future could lead to this being a more complete water supply system and providing its residents and businesses better supply of water.
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conservation and distribution
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in Australia. In this article, we will cover the
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in detail and
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observations that will
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more effective for future applications.

This section provides
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. The
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consists of a
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the pure
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treatment plant for treatment. Any
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IELTS essay The present water supply system

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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