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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

The illustrations drawn in the current page represent a full and adequate data on how Grange park’s configuration of different segments have changed during this century, starting in 1920 and continuing to this moment. The two entrances on the top and the bottom of the park which are located in Arnold and Eldon street respectively, are put aside of relocating or demolishing, but another entrance for cars has been added to the lower right-hand of complex and the rose garden placed on the left top corner has not changed. On the other hand, all the seats and the remained rose gardens have been moved from around of campus to the middle of Grange park instead the fountain which was constructed in the former setting of the park. It worth mentioning, that the musicians’ stage has expanded to an Amphitheatre for concert and in order to decorate the park, a water feature has been added to the whole system. It’s obvious and feasible to declare, Grange park has change a lot.

The illustrations drawn in the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :contemporarymodern
current
 page represent a full and adequate data on how Grange You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlawnsquaregardenestateplazaplace
park’s
 configuration of This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
different
 segments have This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alteredadjusted
changed
 during this century, starting in 1920 and continuing to this moment.

The two entrances on the top and the bottom of the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlawnsquaregardenestateplazaplace
park
 which are located
 in Arnold and Eldon street respectively
, are put
 aside of relocating or demolishing, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 another entrance for cars has been This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accrued
added
 to the lower right-hand of complex and the rose garden placed on the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :departed
left
 top corner has not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alteredadjusted
changed
. On the other hand
, all the seats and the remained rose gardens have been This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :relocated
moved
 from around of campus to the middle of Grange You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlawnsquaregardenestateplazaplace
park
instead
 the fountain which was constructed
 in the former setting of the park.

It seems that the possessive pronoun “its” fits better in this context. Please verify.Its
It
 worth mentioning, that the musicians’ stage has expanded to an Possible spelling mistake. ‘Amphitheatre’ is British English.Amphitheater
Amphitheatre
 for concert and in order to decorate the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlawnsquaregardenestateplazaplace
park
, a water feature has been This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accrued
added
 to the whole system. It’s obvious and feasible to declare, Grange You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlawnsquaregardenestateplazaplace
park
 has This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alteradjust
change
 a lot. 