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The pictures shows that process of making cherry jam

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Look at the photo, that illustrates the process of produce cherry jam. Overall, there are nine stages in pocess, beginning with a sheet is spread on the ground and culminating in a label is sticked on the jars. Firstly, a sheet is spread on the ground and the tree is shaken. Then the cherries are collected. After collecting, the cherries are transported to the processing plant. The next the leaves and stems are taken. The cherries are washed with clean water. The stone is removed out of the middle of the cherry. The next stage the cherries are cooked with fire and extra ingredients are added. The jam is put into the jars. At last a label is sticked on the jars and they are delivered to the markets.
Look at the photo, that illustrates the process of produce cherry jam.

Overall
, there are nine stages in
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pocess
, beginning with a sheet
is spread
on the ground and culminating in a label is
Possible spelling mistake. Did you mean "stuck", the past tense form of the verb 'stick'?
sticked
on the jars.

Firstly
, a sheet
is spread
on the ground and the tree
is shaken
. Then the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cherries
are collected
. After collecting, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cherries
are transported
to the processing plant. The
next
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leaves
and stems
are taken
. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cherries
are washed
with clean water.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
The
stone
is removed
out of the middle of the cherry.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
The
next
stage the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cherries
are cooked
with fire and extra ingredients are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
added
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
The
jam
is put
into the jars. At last a label is
Possible spelling mistake. Did you mean "stuck", the past tense form of the verb 'stick'?
sticked
on the
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
jars and
they
are delivered
to the markets.
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IELTS essay The pictures shows that process of making cherry jam

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
129 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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