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Doctors recommend regular exercise to older people however many people do not take enough exercise.what are reasons and how they will encourage

Doctors recommend regular exercise to older people however many people do not take enough exercise. what are reasons and how they will encourage DqWJ6
In this modern era, many grey hair people are suffering from detrimental diseases because of environmental problems. Doctors deem that it would be beneficial for elder people if they do exercise on the daily basis. There are many causes of this trend which i mentioned in the above paragraphs. The major reason that why senior citizens avoid to take regular exercise is, they are not physically fit. To elaborate, when people getting older they would lose the ability to do every work with full energy. Because they have not much strength present in their body in elder age. Therefore, older people usually avoid to do exercise. Moreover, older people also may have fear of injury. To make it more clear, the bones of body are not strong as much as they in younger age. Sometimes people do that type of exercises that are not fit for their body so they get injury because they have no much strength present in their body in elder age. However, there are some remedies to overcome this problem. The first and foremost solution of this problem is, family will encourage the senior citizens to do exercise. In other words, it's the responsibility of their young adults to make them aware about the benefits of the regular exercise. Because their young children are more knowledge about the advantages of exercises. Secondly, by providing personal trainer to elder people is also good remedy to tackle this problem. To illustrate, nowadays adults are hectic schedule, they have not much time to spend with their family. Thus, if the personal is hired for grey hair people it would be more beneficial for them. Because personal trainer would help them to do exercise and they also guide elder people that which exercise is good for them. Agglomerating all the views it can be conspecious although there are many reasons why senior citizens do not do daily exercise, these problems may solve by using solutions like awareness and personal training.
In this modern era,
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grey
hair
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people
are suffering from detrimental diseases
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because
of environmental
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problems
. Doctors deem that it would be beneficial for
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elder
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people
if they do
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exercise
on the daily basis. There are
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causes of this trend which
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mentioned in the above paragraphs.

The major reason that why senior citizens
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avoid to take
regular
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exercise
is, they are not
physically
fit. To elaborate, when
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people
getting older they would lose the ability to do every work with full energy.
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they have not
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much
strength present in their
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body
in
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elder
age.
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, older
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people
usually
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avoid to do
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exercise
.
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, older
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people
also
may have fear of injury. To
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it more
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, the bones of
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body
are not strong as
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much
as they in younger age.
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people
do that type of
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exercises
that are not fit for their
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body
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they
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get
injury
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they have no
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strength present in their
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in
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elder
age.

However
, there are
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remedies to overcome this problem.

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first
and foremost solution of this
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is, family will encourage the senior citizens to do
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exercise
.
In other words
, it's the responsibility of their young adults to
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make
them aware about the benefits of the regular
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exercise
.
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Because
their young children are more knowledge about the advantages of exercises.

Secondly
, by providing
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personal
trainer to
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elder
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people
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is
also
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remedy to tackle this
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problem
. To illustrate, nowadays adults are hectic schedule, they have not
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much
time to spend with their family.
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, if the
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is hired
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hair
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people
it would be more beneficial for them.
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trainer would
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help
them to do
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exercise and
they
also
guide
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people
that which
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exercise
is
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good
for them.

Agglomerating all the views it can be
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conspecious
although there are
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many
reasons why senior citizens do not do daily
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exercise
, these
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problems
may solve by using solutions like awareness and
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personal
training.
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IELTS essay Doctors recommend regular exercise to older people however many people do not take enough exercise. what are reasons and how they will encourage

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
330 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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