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The number of people being sent to prison is increasing year by year. While some people believe prison is the best way to tackle crime, others suggest that community service is more successful. Discuss both views.

Increased number of people are being prisoned every year. Some would argue that community service shows more success, while others argue that only prison can help to alleviate crime. Even though working for the community can change criminal's mind, victim will not feel safe knowing that criminal is out there. On the other hand, community service provides a great platform for a criminal to help others and gives an opportunity to be a better person again. Thus, their perspective towards society will change and consequently they will be less like to commit any crime again. For an instant, according to a research from Queen University suggest that 60% of criminals who provided community services are now living a normal life resulting in less number of crimes. On the other hand, although community service may benefit criminal, it will be hard for victim to fill safe. There are chances that crime will be repeated again if the criminal is not imprisoned. Victim can live in a constant fear. For example, Leena will not be able to go out for anything as she was kidnapped during her childhood if she will have to see kidnappers in the community. In conclusion, imprisoning the criminal is the only best way to reduce crime and community service is not an option as it is important for victim to feel secure.
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people
are being
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every year.
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Some
would argue that
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community
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service
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shows
more success, while others argue that
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only
prison can
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help
to alleviate
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crime
.
Even though
working for the
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community
can
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change
criminal's mind,
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victim
will not feel safe knowing that
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criminal
is out there.

On the
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other
hand,
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community
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service
provides a great platform for a
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criminal
to
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help
others and gives an opportunity to be a better person again.
Thus
, their perspective towards society will
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change
and
consequently
they will be less like to commit any
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crime
again. For an instant, according to
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a research
from Queen University suggest that 60% of
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criminals
who provided
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community
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services
are
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now
living a normal life resulting in less number of crimes.

On the
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other
hand, although
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community
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service
may benefit
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criminal
, it will be
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hard
for
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victim
to fill safe. There are chances that
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crime
will be
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repeated again
if the
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criminal
is not imprisoned.
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Victim
can
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live
in a constant fear.
For example
,
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Leena
will not be able to go out for anything as she
was kidnapped
during her childhood if she will
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have to
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see
kidnappers in the community.

In conclusion
, imprisoning the
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criminal
is the
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only
best way to
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reduce
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crime
and
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community
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service
is not an option as it is
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important
for
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victim
to feel secure.
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IELTS essay The number of people being sent to prison is increasing year by year. While some people believe prison is the best way to tackle crime, others suggest that community service is more successful.

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