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the number of passengers at a Paris Metro station

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The figure shows the number of people using a Metro station in Paris over a given day. Overall, it can be seen that the starting point is slower than the ending point by a small number. To begin with, the number of passengers rocket from 100 at 6 a. m. to 400 at 8 a. m. . However, there is a moderate fall of approximately 200 over a period of 2 hours, and by 10 a. m. the number is just below 200. From 10 a. m. to 12 p. m. , there is a gradual rise by nearly 100 to the point of almost 300. It increases marginally from almost 300 at midday to roughly 300 at the next 2 hours. Moving to the afternoon figure, there is a considerable decrease from about 300 at 2 p. m. to roughly 200 at 3 p. m. and plunge to the trough point at the upcoming hour. Then the figure reverses to the increasing trend, it goes up significantly by nearly 100 to about 200 at 5 p. m. and surges to the second highest point to just below 400 at 6 p. m. . After that the rising trend no longer continues, it goes down to 100 at 8 p. m. and fluctuates until it finishes just above 100 at 10 p. m. .

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