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The increase in the number of people accessing the internet has led to many consequences

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The increase in the number of people accessing the internet has led to many consequences, including the fact that young people are increasingly immersed and spend most of their time on social networks. Social network addiction is a new disease of the times when young people only read short pieces of information such as friends' status lines, but they gradually become lazy to read long and valuable information such as Read a classic book that has been famous for a long time. To add further credence to my assertion, social networks cause young people to suffer from psychological diseases and prevent youth development. We should educate the people who hold the future of the country to use social networks intelligently, not to be dependent and to be puppets of this technology.

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