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In a very busy routine, shopping is replacing other hobbies. What are the reasons for this? It is a positive pr negetive development.

In a very busy routine, shopping is replacing other hobbies. What are the reasons for this? It is a positive pr negetive development. dlDld
By gone epock, human spend their leisure time with differ activities according to their interest but shopping is the most preferable term instead of other things. This essay intends about positive and negetive aspects discussion. On the one hand, individuals engaged in their professions and they want to stay updated in their friend circle. Youngsters mostly prefer to go shopping in their free time because they want to try new trends on themselves. They want to show a flaunt in their social circle. Since everyone suffering from competition with others than they spend lot of time and money to make their look different from others. To exemplify, a recent survey proves that plethora of people visit in shopping complexes in weekends and they mostly buy latest expensive things instead of old ones. It shows the competition between youngsters regarding their dressing sense. On the other hand, there are some drawbacks of this trend. The principal negetive effect of this is that it is the wastage of money and time because plethora of youngsters spend their lot of money on unnecessary things that they watch from advertisements. They always waste their time to find new trends on online shopping sites although they already know about the quality of online products is very cheap. To exemplify, survey illustrates that 70% of youngsters spend above half of the pocket money on shopping such as clothes, cosmetics as well as. To conclude, I think shopping habit creates a lot of benefits and drawbacks simultaneously because everything would be fruitful with only limit otherwise it can harmful for anyone. So everybody should consider about benefits or hazardous impact before do anything.
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with differ activities according to their interest
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shopping
is the most preferable term
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other
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positive
and
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negetive
aspects discussion.

On the one hand, individuals engaged in their
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professions and
they want to stay updated in their friend circle. Youngsters
mostly
prefer to go
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shopping
in their free
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time
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because
they want to try new trends on themselves. They want to
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show
a flaunt in their social circle. Since everyone suffering from competition with others than they
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spend
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lot of
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time
and
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money
to
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make
their look
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different
from others. To exemplify, a recent survey proves that plethora of
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people
visit in
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shopping
complexes in
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weekends and
they
mostly
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buy
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latest
expensive things
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old
ones. It
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the competition between youngsters regarding their dressing sense.

On the
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hand, there are
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drawbacks of this trend. The principal
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negetive
effect of this is that it is the wastage of
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money
and
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time
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because
plethora of youngsters
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spend
their lot of
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money
on unnecessary things that they
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watch
from advertisements. They always waste their
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time
to find new trends on online
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shopping
sites although they already know about the quality of online products is
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very
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cheap
. To exemplify, survey illustrates that 70% of youngsters
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spend
above half of the pocket
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money
on
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shopping
such as clothes, cosmetics
as well
as.

To conclude
, I
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think
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shopping
habit creates
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a lot of
benefits and drawbacks
simultaneously
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because
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only
limit
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everybody should
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consider about benefits
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before
do anything.
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IELTS essay In a very busy routine, shopping is replacing other hobbies. What are the reasons for this? It is a positive pr negetive development.

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4 paragraphs
276 words
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