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The negative impact of social media on young people outweighs its advantages

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Social media is growing increasingly popular among young people. These platforms have a strong influence on individuals, especially younger generations. Ever since social media was invented, it has become the main platform for communication, and people can keep themselves up to date with their lives, families, and friends' lives. However, in other circumstances, I believe that the drawbacks of social media may exceed the benefits. On the one hand, there are several advantages to using social media. Firstly, using social media allows one to connect with individuals from all over the world. For instance, students studying abroad can keep in touch with their families and friends daily using the video call features of Messenger or various other apps. Additionally, study sessions that are regularly taking place on social networking sites or live streaming services. Learners now have free access to online lessons on such sites regardless of geographic locations. On the other hand, overuse of social media decreases the quality of interpersonal communication, and the consequences of replacing face-to-face interaction are even more significant. For instance, many teens are so addicted to social media that they continuously stare at their screens during family gatherings, paying little attention to the people around them. Moreover, the usage of social media has an impact on the way individuals speak and write, especially among the youth. Many kids nowadays have a habit of employing shortened language, which they commonly utilize in text messages to academic essays. Furthermore, this sort of platform can become a toxic environment where users can be verbally assaulted. For example, unlike traditional bullying, cyberbullying can occur at any time, day or night, and is committed by anonymous sources. Anxiety, fear, depression, low self-esteem, behavioral issues, and academic struggles are just a few challenges teenagers may experience if they are targets. In conclusion, there are both pros and cons of social media, but the downsides of social media are more significant than the advantages.
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is growing
increasingly
popular among young
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people
. These platforms have a strong
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influence
on individuals,
especially
younger generations. Ever since
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social
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media
was invented
, it has become the main platform for communication, and
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people
can
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keep
themselves up to date with their
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lives
, families, and friends'
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lives
.
However
, in other circumstances, I believe that the drawbacks of
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social
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media
may exceed the benefits.

On the one hand, there are several advantages to using
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social
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.
Firstly
, using
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social
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media
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allows
one to connect with individuals from all over the world.
For instance
, students studying abroad can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
in touch with their families and friends daily using the video call features of Messenger or various other apps.
Additionally
, study sessions that are
regularly
taking place on
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social
networking sites or
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live streaming
services. Learners
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now
have free access to online lessons on such sites regardless of geographic locations.

On the other hand
, overuse of
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social
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media
decreases the quality of interpersonal communication, and the consequences of replacing face-to-face interaction are even more significant.
For instance
,
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many
teens are
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so
addicted to
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social
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media
that they
continuously
stare at their screens during family gatherings, paying
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little
attention to the
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people
around them.
Moreover
, the usage of
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social
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media
has an impact on the way individuals speak and write,
especially
among the youth.
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Many
kids nowadays have a habit of employing shortened language, which they
commonly
utilize in text messages to academic essays.
Furthermore
, this sort of platform can become a toxic environment where users can be
verbally
assaulted.
For example
, unlike traditional bullying, cyberbullying can occur at any time, day or night, and
is committed
by anonymous sources. Anxiety, fear, depression, low self-esteem, behavioral issues, and academic struggles are
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just
a few challenges
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teenagers
may experience if they are targets.

In conclusion
, there are both pros and cons of
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social
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media
,
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but
the downsides of
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social
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media
are more significant than the advantages.
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IELTS essay The negative impact of social media on young people outweighs its advantages

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  American English
4 paragraphs
323 words
6.0
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