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A role model is someone with good qualities that we can fight for and work hard to achieve. We may easily find numerous role models in glossy magazines or the internet. Many important qualities of the role model are faded by my father - who always calmly inspires willpower, empathy, and healthy life. The first thing is he always has the willpower to deal with problematic situations. My father's family used to be so poor that they couldn't pay for schooling fees. However he overcame adversity and continued to go to school by trying to get a scholarship at his school. As a result, it became a reality, he had overcome poor circumstances and motivated me by his willpower. In addition, I can not find anyone who has empathy like my father. He is a taciturn man, but it doesn't mean that he doesn't concern for his family. As well as many other Asian fathers. His concern is not shown in his face, it tends to be expressed in his actions. When I got bad results in my studies, he was the one who paid the most attention to how I felt. After that, he will share useful lessons and experiences to motivate me to share some of the bad moods that I am suffering. Last but not least, one of the most meaningful things he has inspired me that is his healthy life. He was very tired after work, he still exercised with me every evening. The workload always puts him under pressure every day, but not because of that, he turns to nicotine, but instead, he will share it with his family to relieve stress. In conclusion, many people have someone to look up to as their models. For me, that is no one else but my father. No matter how he shows his qualities are impressive or not. He is always my impeccable role model. Last but not least, in addition, the first thing Willpower, empathetic person, healthy life. Although he did not force me to do what he used to do, he helped me realize what should be done to develop good qualities like him.
A
role
model
is someone with
good
qualities
that we can fight for and work
hard
to achieve. We may
easily
find numerous
role
models
in glossy magazines or the internet.
Many
important
qualities
of the
role
model
are faded
by my
father
-
who always
calmly
inspires willpower, empathy, and healthy life.

The
first
thing is he always has the willpower to deal with problematic situations. My father's family
used
to be
so
poor that they couldn't pay for schooling fees.
However
he overcame adversity and continued to go to school by trying to
get
a scholarship at his school.
As a result
, it became a reality, he had overcome poor circumstances and motivated me by his willpower.
In addition
, I can not find anyone who has empathy like my
father
. He is a taciturn
man
,
but
it doesn't mean that he doesn't concern for his family.
As well
as
many
other Asian
fathers
. His concern is not shown in his face, it tends to
be expressed
in his actions. When I
got
bad
results in my studies, he was the one who paid the most attention to how I felt. After that, he will share useful lessons and experiences to motivate me to share
some of the
bad
moods that I am suffering. Last
but
not least, one of the most meaningful things he has inspired me
that is
his healthy life. He was
very
tired after work, he
still
exercised with me every evening. The workload always puts him under pressure every day,
but
not
because
of that, he turns to nicotine,
but
instead
, he will share it with his family to relieve
stress
.

In conclusion
,
many
people
have someone to look up to as their
models
. For me,
that is
no one else
but
my
father
. No matter how he
shows
his
qualities
are impressive or not. He is always my impeccable
role
model.

Last
but
not least,
in addition
, the
first
thing

Willpower, empathetic person, healthy life. Although he did not force me to do what he
used
to do, he
helped
me realize what should
be done
to develop
good
qualities
like him.
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IELTS essay favourite your role model

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
359 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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