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The movement of people from the countryside into the cities is happening in many parts of the world, resulting in the problems, especially in cities. What are the causes of this movement, and how can it be reversed Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In modern world, migration has become an essential part of people life around the globe. Consequently, relocation leads to various problems such as over population, unemployment, and environmental pollution. Today, in this essay am going to discuss the causes for the emigration along with that how to overcome such setbacks. First and foremost, individuals commute from remote areas to cities for having a better life. To illustrate clearly, most of the humans in village are not able to meet their daily needs. Such as domestic goods and services because of low income. so persons are moving to developed areas in search of job which satisfies their desires. Secondly, I contemplate that the level of education in under developed places is the other factor to discuss about. Many parts of hinterlands of different countries does not have proper system of education to teach. for example, many schools in remote areas are just able to provide education up to primary or secondary level. so for the students who aim to study higher education undoubtedly, have to travel to cities or countries for studying in private institutions. To overcome this, I pen down that there are few measurements to solve this problem. Government should pay more attention to rules areas of the country and develop some more beneficial infrastructure related to children's studies and quality of jobs. If they have proper infrastructure may be they prefer to stay in their home towns.
In modern world, migration has become an essential part of
people
life around the globe.
Consequently
, relocation leads to various problems such as over population, unemployment, and environmental pollution.
Today
, in this essay
am
going to discuss the causes for the emigration along with that how to overcome such setbacks.

First
and foremost, individuals commute from remote
areas
to cities for having a better life. To illustrate
clearly
, most of the humans in village are not able to
meet
their daily needs. Such as domestic
goods
and services
because
of low income.
so
persons are moving to developed
areas
in search of job which satisfies their desires.

Secondly
, I contemplate that the level of
education
in
under developed
places is the other factor to
discuss about.
Many
parts of hinterlands of
different
countries does not have proper system of
education
to teach.
for
example,
many
schools in remote
areas
are
just
able to provide
education
up to primary or secondary level.
so
for the students who aim to study higher
education
undoubtedly
,
have to
travel to cities or countries for studying in private institutions.

To overcome this, I pen down that there are few measurements to solve this problem.
Government
should pay more attention to
rules
areas
of the country and develop
some
more beneficial infrastructure related to children's studies and quality of jobs.
If
they have proper infrastructure
may be
they prefer to stay in their
home towns
.
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IELTS essay The movement of people from the countryside into the cities is happening in many parts of the world, resulting in the problems, especially in cities. What are the causes of this movement, and how can it be reversed

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